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AA meeting at the local bar

Pour me another shot of courage,
for tonight I face my past.
On second thought just leave the bottle.
I promise I'll try to make this one last.

Yes once again her memories dancing,
filling every corner of my mind.
Sometimes a faithful friend behind the bar to talk to,
and another bottle is the only comfort I can find.

So please keep the liquor flowing
as I take a trip through all the years.
You know the alcohol is the only thing
keeping me from filling this bar up with tears.

 

But then we all have troubles

as I look around this room

there are lots of pretty bottles

but without one single smile it looks more like a tomb.

 

I'm pineing over a women,

while that guy was caught cheating on his wife.

She just lost her mom to cancer,

and over there their friend just took his life.

 

We all lost money in the stock market,

but their retirement money dropped 50% just this week.

And she just left her husband who slept with her best friend

what a real scum bag, a lyer, and a cheat.

 

But together we all seem to find comfort

with another round of the same.

As we talk to our favorite bar keep

our secrets are safe because he only knows our first name.

 

He keeps the drinks a coming serving up therapy in every glass.

You know I have poured out my soul to him for years.

He never judges and  always listens,

to all of our troubles, woes, and fears.

 

 So lets hear it for all the bar tenders

lets give them all a big hand.

because tonight and everynight they are holding

a different kind of AA meeting all throughout this land.

 

 

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  • nursesandyny
    September 3
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    wow,
    powerful.


  • Antebellum
    July 19
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    wow.
    wonderfully written,
    thanks so much for taking the time to enter,
    good luck

  • you have a very defined style in your writings. I can tell you entered a lot into my contest! haha. They are all fantastic, too.

  • This is really freaking fantastic.
    i feel like im actually in the bar with the people you described.
    "different kind of AA meeting all throughout this land"...really true and sad.
    Love this poem, a lot


  • Derge
    July 9
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    "shot of courage" - awesome first line :]

    "there are lots of pretty bottles, but without one single smile..." -this is a pretty, sad image.

    the glimpse into other peoples lives is really beautiful, and almost makes me want to cry. its so real.

    "our secrets are safe because he only knows our first name"- i can relate.

    this is awesome :]
    nice write


  • ladylyric
    June 26

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    It kind of gives light to the dark side of addiction. How we tend to feel comfort with each other as well as the booze.
    Great write..I dig the title a lot too! Thanks for entering.


  • cybilseyes silver member
    June 22

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    Nice subject matter.. It tells a multitude of stories and invokes a lot of emotions thanks so much for entering good luck!
    Cyb

  • this is wounderful

    its so heart felt that it makes me actually wanna sit doen and cry...


  • Verdeboy
    June 19

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    You have done a great job describing the anti-AA meetings that occur all too frequently in bars and taverns.

    I really like the content of your poem, but since you've asked for suggestions, I will give you one: In rhyming poetry, it is essential that all the lines have approximately the same number of syllables in order to keep the rhythm and flow good.

    "But then we all have troubles
    as I look around this room
    there are lots of pretty bottles
    but without one single smile it looks more like a tomb."

    In this stanza, for example, the syllable count is 7/7/8/14
    If you shortened the last line it would greatly improve the flow of this stanza.

    "But then we all have troubles
    as I look around this room
    there are lots of pretty bottles
    but this place feels like a tomb."

  • aside from a few spelling and gramatical errors, this is a very good write. i think you have a good chance placing in my contest.
    good luck


  • Poetess12
    June 6

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    I like this poem and so true it is.
    A bartender is one that listens well and many people turn to alcohol when they are feeling depressed, etc. as a way to release upset feelings. I like the rhyme and word use in your poem.

    Thank you for your entry


  • dwellondreams
    March 22

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    Wow. I really liked this. Well done. The opening two lines,
    Pour me another shot of courage,
    for tonight I face my past.
    Just wow. I loved that. Really drew me into the story.


  • once
    February 10

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    beautiful

    this is deep shit. the way you have twisted alcohol into the cure rather than the cause puts up endless considerations in my mind. the rhyming is not pretentious and it works throughout the poem. good job and good luck


  • karma-n-peace
    February 10
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    Oh my...You have penned a picture of truth.
    This really knocked me over, as if your reached inside the hearts and souls of the patrons and carefully and thouroughly read each line in the stories of their fractured beings.
    Much Applause to you for such a beautifully sad creation.


  • Slinky-milinky
    February 10

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    wow, this is really does paint a vivid picture.

    "as I look around this room
    there are lots of pretty bottles"

    -I adored this line. ironic and stunning. If I open my contest up to prewrites i'll be sure to let you know.

  • Nicely done. I remember the heavy drinking days from years ago very well. You have done a good job portraying it here.

    Mike

  • Shawnecy808
    February 8

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    "So please keep the liquor flowing
    as I take a trip through all the years.
    You know the alcohol is the only thing
    keeping me from filling this bar up with tears."

     

    Thought these lines were the best.Bottoms up bro.Great pen


  • PoJonez
    February 8

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    Very deep, and a viewpoint I never thought of. I had to stop a couple times just to think about how my view has slightly altered, looking at drinking from a view I never knew existed. thank you for sharing with us all


  • psychomonkey
    February 6
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    wow,this was a really great write. I loved the first four lines the best. I feel like i could relate to this piece but many people probably can. the fourth line sounded like me pleading with my friends. This was probably one of my favorites that i have read on this site great job.


  • Mrs D
    February 2
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    this is beautiful.....a lil funny.......
    the flow was interupted a bit eg:

    "there are lots of pretty bottles
    but without one single smile it looks more like a tomb."
    the latter line was a bit too lenghty.....

    and a 'c' is missing in cancer...


    but all in all this write was really good .....
    great depiction of reality!!!!


    keep it up !

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