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Fractured Realities

There you sit, riding the path of those desolate dreams,

upon the sunken tracks of oblivion, your sanity screams.

Shake away the dense smoke of those now aimless desires,

relinquish those otiose visions to the realms of destined fires.

 

 

Be calm, the time for panic has come crashing upon cracked concrete,

the embodiment of the reality that you have surrendered to defeat.

Beside you, clinging to billowing flames, lies the carcass of your mind.

Cinders of desperation couple with crisp skeletons, now, your shrine.

 

 

Embrace the emptiness of the dark journey down the tracks of deceit.

Cascading into moonbeams that contradict the dimness so replete.

Oh, the disconsolate smile meshes with the emasculation of all hope,

as blue-gray midnight vapors of anarchy with demonic screams elope.

 

 

Pale thoughts weave their presence into midnight strewn insanity,

dangling from the waves that strangulates the existence of vanity.

Blistered sky, hot with oceanic storms, can't deny the raging psychosis,

as this your sardonic efforts dissolves into denial of even osomosis.

 

 

Twigs thrive from the cracks of your burdened soul into obsidian smoke.

Fractured and faltering, though you may be, reach upward to invoke,

the natural strength of all the convictions that beseech you to stand.

Ride the darkness back into the light, for your life is yours to command.

 

                 Marjorie Joyce Leslie

                            01/30/09

 

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  • Beret55 silver member
    February 24
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    A most dificult poem to write, and you did a great job of it.


  • LdyBrknWing gold member
    February 3

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    Most Excellent

    You make even the most difficult challenges appear effortless. You tackled not only a picture prompt, but one that required a certain number of words that had to be used within the piece as well? You're a glutton for punishment, but it definitely paid off in this piece that is nothing short of brilliant! If I didn't know better, I would think your poem had inspired the picture; really a magnificent piece, Joyce, with so much imagery and dark emotion in this. You are MY "Shero," girl! Awesome, as always. Your work never disappoints!

    Paula


  • Deceits Tears silver member
    February 2
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    Great imagery, great flow, and wonderful rhyme
    Great job and thankyou for your entry

  • Very nicely done. Greatl vocabulary. Although I have done it a few times, it is rare to see a rhyming poet to write such long lines. I think it is terrific. My hat is off to you...

    Mike


  • lunarlunacy
    February 1

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    you have mastered rhyme, a form I find conforming yet you set words to flight with it. wonderful write and provoking pic.


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    January 30

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    excellent~

    You have penned this to perfection
    Just wow............
    Love the imagery too
    Best of luck in the contest
    A winner in my book
    Hugs
    Susan~~~


  • penman gold member
    January 30
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    Wonderful

    Very creative and well done. A terrific expression. Best of luck in the contest.

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