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The Gardener's Surrender

 

 

 

 

 

 

Get thee to bed thou fine braid of silken flesh and breasts,
oh mine of a beauty unified —
thou thighsome firmament and poem,
for does my mysterious destiny flower unfold my dreams.

The gods have granted me absolution, for safe indulgence —
gift of a mortal divine.

But ‘tis I now, gladly, who doth long in surrender,  instead.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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dedicated to my ... Swan


option #3

image credit: http://shinobinaku.deviantart.com/art/My-Shelter-108446962

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  • Allyce May gold member
    July 26
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    Sigh, so beautiful; but then, your inspiration is as such


  • just2write silver member
    June 21

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    Excellent

    This reads llike words of the Old Bard himself. I truly enjoyed this lusty read. Excellent use of the words firmament. Shakespeare could do no better.


  • FransB gold member
    April 6

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    Ah, this shook my thoughts

    to enjoyment, causing me to read again and again. 'Tis true, this figment of the mind, when garden brings heart to mine lips! Frans


  • jcat gold member
    February 6
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    This was just truly gorgeous.....Love your use of the english language!!!!


  • geckogirl silver member
    January 31
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    Sweet

    A perfect dedication to your Swan...

  • oldpoets
    January 31

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    You are way over the top with this write. Words so soft yet the emotion is incredable. I envey your awsome skill with words softly spoken.


  • kaibab silver member
    January 31

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    Such is grace, her feathered space, as breezy gust of prairie flames, just when wingsong touches earth as voice of hope to be remembered...lovely work


  • Night Hope gold member
    January 31

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    Gorgeousness x Infinity = Your Art

    Sighhh...This is...you are...simply too beautiful for any language
    as yet invented. Make s'more words up quick, will ya, Sweetheart'?
    I love you, Po'try Man. C'mere, you.

    ♥


  • Sonja
    January 31

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    This is what I call a challenge of poetical heart. It is hard to comment because I will have to copy and paste the whole of this poem.
    ~Sonja~


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    January 31

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    Just beautiful! Your words were like a caress to my mind. Love it.
    Best wishes in the contest.
    Gaylene


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    January 30

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    aww this is so truly lovely and gentle!!! A beautiful write indeed u did a beautiful job with this piece!!!! This is wonderful!!!! I love it!!!


  • Ithica silver member
    January 30

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    Oooozing with sensuality... and enticing visuals!!! Nicely done...

  • Bad Bill
    January 30

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    What can one say? Your use of words is so imaginatively challenging that the normal rules of criticism are blown out of the water. You are a poet who constantly pushes at the boundaries - a true original.

    Best wishes,
    Bill

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