standing in quick sand-lies
with you doing a handstand on my shoulders
so I can whisper "it'll-all-be-okay"'s in your ears
with no concern for my sinking
but I don't need it
I was worried only for you
pushing me away to try
to save me or yourself?
promising you'd never hurt me
yet tearing me about with your mistrust
I was only worried for you
Thoose final words you typed
because you were too cowardly to say
made me realise, that why did I accept your world
on my skelital shoulders?
when you just constanly reject my help
and im not so worried anymore
so I'm blocking you out my life
and giving my help to thoose who'll accept it
because now im going to worry
over people worth worrying about
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cant spellchecck or friends laptop will die, so please ignore typos, real story, what an idiot
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i did leave too much on your shoulders...And i cant beleive i was so stupid to decline the help you were trying to give me, but my problems dont matter i just want to help you. I was such a idiot and i deserve everything i get...
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um this is ok i like the meaning of it and i like the way you put your words but puzzles me are you really not concerned about your life or more about his either way i love it all and you rock
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Great work sissy
I know the feeling.... and Hollie always remember.... if you need someone to talk to.... at any time... IM me or send me a message. Oh and loved the poem It beats mine by 1,000,000,000,000,000,000,000 miles!!!! XD (you know what i mean i hope) My poems suck! DX -sigh- (._.) -
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your poems dont suck! Yours are much much much much much much much much (ect ect) better than mine
and you can always Im me too
-le sigh- I misses you!
oh, oh, oh if you think your poems suck, read my two new ones, they ish very very very very very (ect ect) suckish
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Awwww
this is such a sad poem. yet it makes me wanna bash that person up. i can relate to this poem. its like you're just trying to help but the person's taking it for granted and pusing u away. now that just sucks. goshies. well, this poem expressed that feeling very well, clever word choice. keep writing, i loved it as much i love you my favourie stalker take care, and ont worry about this person alright, she/he doesnt deserve your awesome help
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I know what it's like to do your best to help those not worth it... usually with me though, it's more people who start to use me. I've only had one who couldn't really accept, but I don't regret trying to help. I hope that taking this step will help you focus more on yourself and on the people in your life who are more worth it. I liked the quicksand metaphor here, a bit explained for my taste, but it's very eloquent and appropriate and clever.
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