Odd how the sharpest tears come just as I shut the door,
as soon as I'm out of sight I my whole world falls apart.
Mascara starts pouring down.. little black puddles falling.
head's really pounding now but I just can't dull the pain.
Run the water as hot as it will go,
need to get you out of my system.
I would scrub until my skin is raw
if I thought it'd take you off my mind.
Boy was I a fool to think you'd ever change,
you really had to me going for a while.
Thought that I could help but I was wrong,
all it got me was a few bruises on my ego.
You really had me thinking that it would be ok,
that we'd move on and still be friends
but it really never works that way.
When I walk out of this bathroom,
I'll put on my happy smiling face,
you'll never know how much I loved you,
for you never really cared a bit at all.
I'll pretend that I'm alright,
oh you won't ever see me cry.
The minute that door opens..
you can't hurt me anymore.
A contest entry
- show me love? or hate? by XxemohatexX.
650 points, ended March 3, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - GIVE ME YOUR BEST by Mila7.
600 points, ended March 24, 60 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i have been here
Well as a man I have been to that same place, but with me if was the woman who would not change... I really feel for you.
Your writing is beautiful and I could sense your pain in the words...
wonderful
Patrick
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I respect the raw honesty of thought and feeling in this. It takes a great deal of courage to write like this and I almost feel like I am intruding when I read it. I tend to hide in metaphor but you are laying your soul bare and exposed. I have such respect for that. There is a redeeming sense of "I will not be defeated" within it also and I cheer for you in that.
A very impressive if not unnerving write. Well done poet.
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Oooh huni
But at least he can't hurt you anymore, you are one brave woman
Fantastic write, soo full of emotion.
XXX
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Thanks. He's one of the like three people I truly dislike so honestly after all the crap I went through over him he just doesn't matter anymore..lol
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thats reallly good
takes time I expect.
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how i agree.. your awsome ... this was a great wright and i love it ... and i understand tryign to cover it up not let them hurt you but sometimes the more you hide it the more they win the more they hurt you adn the more you tear yourself apart but you jstu cna be the one to tell him ur hurtign jsut so hell come back it jsut doesnt work that way i lvoe it its relya good
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Thanks for the honorable mention!!
Glad you liked it!
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i really hate that anyone would or could make you feel this way....you are the best...you know that, right?!?
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awe this is good it makes me sad to see you sad.
ily<3
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yes well Kyle's a fuckface
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