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Love's Amusement out

Being amused isn't like her,
Like another female friend kindly gabbed,
her brain furiously hates laughter,
But I didn't fall from her jab,

I caught her laughter's liar,
I kept battling her brain's fire,
Amidst all deciding it couldn't happen,
Grow her love did,
Along each flower's curtail,
It Desperately drank from heart's desire,
and doused dammed fire

A contest entry

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  • Jorgandr
    February 1

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    Excellent

    Wow this was pretty amazing I think. One of your better works Redsoldier! I need to enter some of these contest things sometime lol.


    • Redsoldier245
      February 2
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      one of my better works? Wow can you give a compliment without criticism just once? lol(you know im kidding)


  • afroqban
    January 30

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    This is really cool. You really nailed it! I love this line: “Grow her love did” reminds me of Yoda from star wars lol. Good job and best of luck to you in the contest


  • islekine gold member
    January 30

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    I like it!

    Best wishes in the contest and always.
    Write on!

  • Just4u
    January 30
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    Thanks for the entry...good luck in the contest

    Eddy

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