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My Sleeping Angel

Sleep my darling angel
Is there a wish you want me to grant
coz u have been so nice that i cant,
deny u a gift which u have been asking so long
The expression in your eyes
when you first saw it in diguise
sitting there behind the glass
waiting for you and me to pass
To have a look upon it
thats what it wanted
and how it taunted the desire in you..
You pressed my hands as i wanted you to walk
and how you sat there on the street
dirtying up your pretty frock
Is that what you wish as a present?
As i cant see your face so unpleasent.
So sleep my darling angel
As there is a gift lying by your bedside
I am waiting for you to have a look
Is this the same thing you wanted
By hook or by crook?

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  • X-Elmo-X
    January 30
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    this is great
    i wish you luck in the contest
    beautifully written
    thanks for sharing


  • Snowing Kisses gold member
    January 30

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    THIS IS VERY TANTILISING, IT HAS AN EARTHY FEEL TO IT, VERY NOW, IT HAS RATHER A SENSE OF ROGER MGOUGH ABOUT IT (MY PET SLIPPER) I LIKE IT ERY MUCH THANKS FOR ENTERING