Making our list and checking it twice,
I try to guide her to the price that is right.
Trendy are the things which bring her heart such delight.
Excitedly we rush from rack to rack
She shouts through the store;
"MOM! We forgot to get me a backpack!"
On our way home we'll make a quick stop,
...so we had thought.
Arriving at the last store, together we race,
Laughing and playing in the stormy wet weather.
Suddenly she stops and looks heaven bound,
It hasn't taken me long to discover,
There's no wound to be found.
It's no twisted ankle that had suddenly dropped,
My baby girl sobbing, onto the cold and wet ground.
I hold her close to my heart as we sit crying together,
Now feeling the bite of the bitter fall weather.
Ignoring the audience that's now gathered 'round,
I quietly whisper into her ear...
"Hush my sweet girl, daddy's still near".
Instead of getting a backpack for binders 'n books,
We leave for the safety of home...
Avoiding the gawkers and all their strange looks.
God, how I wish I could soothe her broken hearts ache.
Weeping silent sobs in the privacy of the dark lonely night.
Saddend by the knowledge there is nothing,
That can ever make it all right.
Fall leaves turning color.
Excited children running for the bus.
Has forever been changed for the(now)three of us.
Remember these words when you see a child crying.
It may not be a silly little bump or a bruise
Perhaps something much deeper is wounded inside her.
Author notes
knickerdew
This is a pre write but for some reason I wasn't able to enter it without copy and paste.
A contest entry
- Their Really Gone (Grieving Process) by FallenFromGrace1102.
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wow,this is so sad,you put me in the middle of this heartwrenching story,great write as always,i am so sorry,i do hope yall find peace
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Wow. I really like this write. You have a way with words. I could really feel the emotion from this piece. There was a lot of imagination put into this poem, and I really like how you ended the peice; how it was a story then the end kind of makes you take a look back at the story and relate it to real life, and how there is always a crying child somewhere, and you never do know the real reason. Interesting piece. It was sad, thought provoking, and well written. Great job, and thanks for entering my contest. Good luck.
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Thank you for the great comment on this...
It's actually quite old ( I wrote it in 2006 ) but for some reason I can't enter it without using sopy and paste.
The imagination in this isn't imagination at all I'm sorry to say; my husband/childrens father was killed and this was written right after he died and my daugher and I were going shopping for more school stuff.
Thanx again for the wonderful comment and best of luck in judging your contest
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Heartfelt!!
Beautifully written, if only everyone could stop and think of such things when they see a child crying. It is so heart wrenching when the cause of their tears cannot be helped.
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wow i loved it. its really brilliant, you really captured my imagintion well done
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deeply sad..
go i feel for your child's pain, and yours my friend...be strong..
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