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Our First Summer

Your eyes dance with love,

Glow in my heart,

As the reflection

Of the sparks

In the bonfire

Tease me with smiles

From you to me!

 

No denying love,

Its' not the flames

Of a nighttime with you

That warms my heart.

It's you!

 

Pinching my nose

As your arms envelop me

In a warm hug,

You, my love blanket,

A shoulder to cry on,

I can't remember ever, ever

Feeling this way before!

 

As the sun goes down

Over the horizon,

Your kiss tells me

I am not the only one

Falling head over heels

For you!

 

Many tomorrows

From now

We will look back

Never  forgetting

Our summer

Of first love!

  

 

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First love romance, and a romance that lasts into eternity on earth...Memories of a first summer together..

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  • Chad Cooper gold member
    2 days ago
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    Very beautiful words put together! This can touch anyones heart, man or women.


  • Tania M Camargo
    November 8
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    Beautiful and romantic, unforgettable
    the first summer.
    Memorable scenes of love!
    Kisses


  • lesbian-in-love
    October 24

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    This was interesting. It was quite very well done. I enjoyed reading this. You are going on to round 2. Thanks so much for entering and best of luck to you in the contest.

  • Romantic and heartfelt.
    Bravo Rose Angel


  • OldePoet
    July 17

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    Funny how first love feels like a leaf on the breeze, feeling both small and large in the moment of airy caresses (not to mention the sunset revealing the blazing of two hearts being within it's first love).

    Beautiful writing!

  • Lovely...

    Romantically sublime... "Our First Summer" sung to love.

    In respect and admiration,

    Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU

  • goalsv
    June 7
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    A truly romantic tale that has a happy and joy overtone. So sweet and calm that the reader can;t help butput themselves into this situation.

  • This is a beautiful piece of poetry, I can feel the love fandango from the screenSimply beautiful, thanks for sharing your poetic heart.
    Be blessed in all you do.

    Tony

  • Congratulations on the silver, this is very deserving of it and I just love the way your pen flows.

    "No denying love,
    Its' not the flames
    Of a nighttime with you
    That warms my heart.
    It's you!"

    This speaks of true love for it is not all about flames and moments of heated passion, it is about all things that make up togetherness.

    You know Rose, people ask me what is true love?

    I always tell them:

    " True love is a measure of passion balanced with compassion and understanding this is the key to a loving relationship that will withstand all chalanges, all matters of opportunity to make life better for both partners"

    And there you have it, I so enjoyed reading your poem and thanks for sharing your wonderful talent.

    I like it, I like it so!

  • judmc
    May 13

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    no complaints

    A lovely straight from the heart emotional poem
    about true unconditional love,nice imagery and meaning
    Pleasant to read I quite enjoyed it... Write On
    ....George
    (give my "Within My Heart" a whirl you might like it)

  • awwww

    wow mom this is sooo good i enjoyed and i could picture it in my mind... i wish i could have a love like that right now most men are jerks.

    much love your daughter
    angie


  • Umi Juvariel
    April 9

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    Sweet and short with a hint of true emotion. I really enjoyed this piece for it made me smile and brightened my day. Excellent write and good luck in my contest.


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    April 3

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    Aw a delight to read
    Such a breath of romance
    the beauty of love
    and those memories to treasure
    Congratulations on the Silver
    Julie x


  • Sandygram silver member
    March 28

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    So Romantic

    This was a delight to read. True love is so hard to find but is so worh it when it happens along. A lovely poem sis. Hugs, Many Blessings. Sandy


  • Re-invention silver member
    March 25
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    aww very pretty and romantic congrats on the prize! well done!


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    March 22

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    Very sweet and heartfelt!
    Lovely work here my friend and congratulations
    to you on your Silver trophy! Well done!




    Jeremy0826


  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    March 22
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    I love the feel of this...so sweet! I am featuring it for today's poem, love...


  • poetmaster32
    March 15
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    First loves are great. nice job.

  • poetmaster32
    March 6
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    love is a great thing to have, but it can be rare.


  • Rovingone gold member
    March 5

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    A very touching personal account of love and passions between two and the lightness of the intimacy between you and he. It's something very private hinted at in images of truly fond reminiscence.


  • Flowergirl
    February 27
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    i love so sweat and cute keep up the gret work...


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    February 21

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    Oh wow Mom a Silver!!

    trophy,Congrats well deserved too! you are a great poet mom.I love your poety and your use of words thank you so much for sharing a little peice of your heart as always, muah kisses for you !

    Rend


  • Jesann gold member
    February 20

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    You have captured that wonderful giddy feeling of being in love.
    This poem is delightful...the emotion and imagery is just wonderful.
    Love your last verse,..and no we don't forget !!
    Congrats on the Silver

  • pinklogic
    February 16

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    this is a very emotional piece
    i love it!
    the last stanza finishes it off brilliantly and powerfully! im glad you got a trophy for this! its well worth it

    well done !!

    PinkLogic


  • aboomer silver member
    February 13
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    Nice job with the emotion and memories in this. Congrats on the Silver!


  • condor gold member
    February 13
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    This was a beautiful write that spoke so gently from the heart. What inspiration true love can call upon you. The first love of your life always seems to be the one which can either tear your world apart or make it sing with the angels. A brilliant piece well worded and well setout. Thank you for the write. Congratulations on the silver trophy.


  • morgana raven Greeters member
    February 9

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    I love the last stanza, I think it was a perfect ending. Emotions displayed very well here. Great piece of work.
    Laura.


  • libithina
    February 8

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    Oh this is adorable Rosemary, talk about the feel good factor
    I have just melted ..
    wrapped and captivated totally s
    and with Valentines
    Blisss
    Lib x x s for you dear Rose

  • ea silver member
    February 8

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    "You, my love blanket" - I love that. This is so romantic and indeed, bubbly. A great read as we approach Valentine's Day. Congrats on this winning write.


  • condor gold member
    February 7

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    This was a beautiful poem with reflections on your first summer together. Very gentle in the wording and so much tenderness being poured into the whole write. I loved it. Congratualtions on the silver trophy. Very much deserved.


  • Spiritual Soul
    February 5

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    aww Auntie this is so precious, I love it! So much love and beauty in your words. It makes me feel the love you feel. Amazing write and congrats on your trophy!!
    Love yah,
    ~Michaela~

  • artie
    February 1

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    Sweet love poem

    First love lives on for a life time.
    Artie
    Thank you for your encouraging
    comments about my poems.

  • artie
    February 1
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    Sweet love poem


  • Kathraina silver member
    January 31

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    Aww this is soooo beautiful!!!!!!! I LOVE THIS!!!!!!!!! I'm amazed by this piece
    Wonderful imagery and flow. Thank you for entering and good luck!

    ♥ Kathraina

  • A-muse-in-writer
    January 30

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    Wow ... this is so beautifully romantic, did you enter this in my romance competition??? This is fantastic. I loved every crafter phrase. Speechless in this one.


  • penman gold member
    January 30
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    Excellent

    Aww, wonderful and sweet write. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Puppydog gold member
    January 30
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    SO SWEET!!!

    Oh the budding of ones first romance, the deeply felt passion and joy. 's

  • goalsv
    January 30

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    Good job Rose, a beautiful loving piece that leaves you with a warm feeling inside. So calming and sensual.


  • X-Elmo-X
    January 30
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    beautifully written and very emotional
    thanks for sharing
    p.s good luck in the contest


  • BonnieQ silver member
    January 30
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    Oh The Memories :)

    Oh, my darling Rose, this is quite simply exquisite. The imagery is as magical as that open fire and the magic of first love. You have captured the feelings, the romance and beauty of it all so incredibly well. This quite obviously should earn the GOLD!

    Much love & Hugs, SisBon

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