What passed for love when I was seventeen
With stars electric shooting through my veins
Was shallow longing for appealing mien,
To bind another with my pliant chains.
Though few the years that passed when I met you
It was your smile and charm that tipped my heart
Your bright facility of mind shone through,
Brought me a world beyond my wordsmith's art.
Our journey, one of distance, miles and mind,
Has tested wits and both our childlike dreams
That love was sweet and ever light and kind;
Life travels led us far through dark extremes.
Love carried us through blows beyond belief;
It strengthened and endured to pain's relief.
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Better to have loved, and lost...
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Line two is especially beautiful to me! I love your comfortable and elegant felicity of phrase!
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I used to write down sayings I'd made up in my journal. This piece reminded me of one I did in the 1980's. "I am not one to reign in a horse that would run free." Brava, Scribe. 
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Wow - I am so going to read the whole series!
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I so love sonnets and this is a pleasure to read.
"Life travels led us far through dark extremes."
So profound. I love the journey theme, its one of great deepness to me.
Lovely.
K
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Lovely...I too had a soulmate for 31 years...
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After i wrote this, I read it to my beloved, and was so pleased that she liked it, too; that's better than a trophy, isn't it?
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Gorgeous write! I just loved this!
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Thank you so much -- I wrote it for the contest, but the content rather sneaked up on me!
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oh it is soooooooooooooooooooo great to read some rhyme that actually uses meter. good work on your sparkling pentameter!
i love this poem
it makes me feel very good
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I'm so glad... I do still believe in true love, and in soul mates; if we are very lucky, these are one and the same. But one may have many kindred spirits!
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Our journey, one of distance, miles and mind,
Has tested wits and both our childlike dreams
Nicely done and something about those lines calls out to this old weathered heart. Thank you for entering. -
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You were great to invent the contest -- I enjoyed writing in form!
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It's sweet in a weathered way, if that makes any sense. Some wonderful lines in here; the first one drew me right in. Good luck in the contest!
C
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I LOVE the term "weathered"! It is absolutely perfect for the tone I was trying to achieve. Thank you so much! Lita
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oh good! i used that word specifically cuz it was exactly the right one to describe how it felt, so i'd say you accomplished your mission lol
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sweet music
spread out like keys on a piano..plucking the magic of love that makes the heart dance! lovely write my friend..
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Well, I guess I think we need all the love poems we can produce -- just trying to do my share!
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so perfectl
a gotcha with the first two lines
"What passed for love when I was seventeen
With stars electric shooting through my veins"'
and you do not let go!!
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Thanks for the kind words! The first line just popped into my head, and after that, the rest fell out (LOL). Sometimes the Muses are really at work!
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