X marked the spot,
on that fateful day,
he glanced at her,
she couldn't look away,
shy as she was,
he took her breath
and sent it to the stars
she fell that day,
and each day more,
he held her strong,
he kept her warm,
each touch,
each whisper,
every goose-bump
telling another story
of a lover's dream of ecstasy
they grew,
she fell harder and deeper,
each year sweeter than the next,
babies turned to teens turned to parents
still living their dream,
loving and whole
Alzheimer's or no,
they refuse to let go
such a sweet day it was
when she fell
A contest entry
- My 2nd annual, 5th and possibly final, make me feel good contest. by Whyitt U.
2250 points, ended February 10, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Ohmygosh ~
This is so damn beautifully penned and sweet and romantic and sad my heart just pounds as it tries not to cry
Reminds me kinda of the Notebook - perfectly penned
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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this is a sweet story of love happening and growing over time, even in spite of Alzheimers, they refused to let go. Veyr sweet and enduring write.
wyattxxx
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I really liked the play on words
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each touch,
each whisper,
every goose-bump
telling another story
of a lover's dream of ecstasy
beautful, hearfelt piece. it was sad yet inspirational.
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sweet
this poem is awesome! it's such a sweet love story and i love the imagery and language used to tell it -
awww sis this is so truly beautiful!!!! You did an absolutely lovely and incredible job with this write!!!! I adore it!!!! This is so sweet and sentimental ur gentle words almost kiss the page!!!!! This is so lovely!!!! Well done!!!!!! !!!!!!!
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