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Hurt

You broke my heart and for that I can't forgive
I did nothing but love you and this is the thanks I get
What remains left of my heart lays shattered below
Seems as if this was how my heart was supposed to be all along

All this may mean nothing at all to you, and you may even smile at my pain
Confusion, guilt, and pain are all holding me down tightly; I can't breathe
The cold, hating person you are now I hate and no longer want in my life
How I feel now is too much pain to handle, so thank you for that bonus too

Because of you I find myself crying for you night after night nonstop
Your rejection cut me like a knife, and my tears were never dried
Hopefully today is different and you will be forgotten
Damages to my heart begin to stitch back together again

For once, I can actually try moving on and get on with my life
Memories I've still got are now locked up with no key, just like my heart
No longer will you cause me sadness, anger, guilt, or unnecessary tears
Good luck piecing together the burned remnants of my heart's key

Today I finally spread my wings, forever released from your prescence
Things that held me down dissolving away forever; fate doesn't smile anymore
I am done with you and no longer will you mess with me or my emotions again
Everything is the way it should be, you just a past memory to be forgotten

Author notes

cant you tell she loves you<3
by the look on her face when you talk to her..

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  • rainbows. gold member
    July 7

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    For once, I can actually try moving on and get on with my life
    Memories I've still got are now locked up with no key, just like my heart
    No longer will you cause me sadness, anger, guilt, or unnecessary tears
    Good luck piecing together the burned remnants of my heart's key

    I really like this. Thank-you for entering it into my contest.


  • Antebellum
    April 2
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    Love the last stanza.
    great write good luck


  • Englandgirl2008
    March 6

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    Really good poem
    I am able to relate to this poem.
    Like the person below me said about the guy.
    I started cutting after my ex broke up with me. (Well one reason why I started to cut)


  • stargardt13
    February 25

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    i can relate to you very well... I first started to cut myself after the guy i really really liked decided he just wanted to be friends... I know how painful it can be. It just breaks everything you have. Thanks for entering my contest. nice poem


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 15

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    I have been trhough similar and can relate to this so much sweetie. I have been broken over and over it isn't fair.


  • redhanded
    February 6

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    very good write. such emotion involved in here that I can relate to alot. thanks so much for your entry and best of luck to you in this contest and in the future
    andi
    (redhanded)


  • LoveGoneMad
    February 2
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    Wonderful piece...

    A piece full of raw emotion with a hint of personal feelings, well done.


  • jmk8602
    January 31

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    Hurt-

    This was definitely a piece with a lot of emotion behind it. It has a gritty, personal sound to it that causes it to resound with anyone who has been through a similar situation.

    I think it could use a little revision, some repetition of words in the second stanza (pain, hate) stood out while reading it.

    Overall, a nice write with a lot of potential. I look forward to reading more work from you in the future. Thank you and good luck!


  • Xxnightmare21xx
    January 30

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    i really liked this angel. it has alot of emotion and i hope you win something in the contest

    kaycee

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