I
As I ponder life,
the only thing moving is
the eye of the storm.
II
Unsure of what to
do, I do nothing, while life
rains all around me.
Author notes
Double Haiku, inspired in part by this golden Haiku written by Celticpoet:
Raindrops
raindrops fall softly
dancing on shivering leaves
the sky is crying
alternative last line ('the sky weeps for us').
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This is just...
I don't know what to say...
like Sonja said below, this speaks volumes in so few words, I hope all is well with you Cyn
All the best and take good care, always
Ken
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This is one of those what speaks a lot with a less words. Great poetry.
~Sonja~
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Lovely, though bittersweet.
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Perfect!
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Ooh.. dear friend! How much you say in this double haiku! So much like a metaphor....your rain and the storm, when I hear about California and the news.....Missin ya....but glad to pop in ...Always love your writes dear friend
penning.... 
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Love your thoughts here and the comparison you use. These are the kind of thoughts I have to while rain is pouring outside and down the window panes.I think It's kind of happy sad;at least life is raining - maybe the water will rejuvenate.
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I can relate to this, sadly. LOL.
The pondering, and the sitting around doing nothing..
and the rains falling down all around me.
Not always in that order, but nonetheless..
It sadly seems it happens to me on those blah days.
Thanks for sharing sis, love ya, and appreciate ya!
Bro Timothy
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hmm
im sorry not realy my type of poem but im sure others will like it
well done though any way
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