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Unmasked edited

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 A dream it was,
a device to siphon sympathy.
Marking all that has passed for loves pretense,
forfeited, now spent.
A sea change it would seem,
awakened in another realm.
  Passing sweet
the aftertaste of loves deceit
lingers on my lips
unmasked in naked light.

Author notes

...a change of mood,  upon discovering a lover was truly masked and untrue, even though suddenly confronted with the truth, the taste still lingers and it is not all bad, we wear a mask to hide our true selves, once unasked we are responsible;e for all actions

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  • Everwind Rising
    February 15

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    Lack of puntuation (commas, dashes, periods) and capitalization made the first part of this poem hard for me to follow. Writing in this style always holds the possibility of confusing the audience of where one thought ends and another begins especially when there is only one stanza in the poem.

    However, I felt that you became much clearer and impacting as the poem progressed and I found the last six lines to be really excellent in clarity of thought and use of imagery. You have a couple of misspellings (loves pretense and loves deceipt should be love's pretense and love's deceipt).


    • Draig aine gold member
      February 15
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      thank you

      the reediting helps allot, and I can stump spell check with ease,