I'm the type to look at you,
At tell you what I think is true.
I could care less about your day,
I guess thats bitchy, in a way.
Bluntness comes with my cunning eyes,
Deception causes useless lies,
I can smell a snitch from about a mile.
I wake with smile, that you just can't take
And I'll give you some lessons,
If you want that type of "cake"
If you find a man who's dumb enough,
To give a crap about useless stuff.
Who follows you through all your shopping,
And promises he wont go "girl" hopping.
Then maybe I could count it true,
That you are a bitch, as I am too.
I love the truth, it sets you free.
Some people think it's a bit obscene
Thou when the night life comes alive
I love to see the imagery,
Burning through your eyes.
I will stand up for what is right,
And tell you if I don't like your sight.
If you have issues, or disagree
Then you should quickly,
Up and leave.
Author notes
Rahahaa I love it.
A contest entry
- I'm A Bitch, Deal With It! by Poetryintheblood.
550 points, ended February 3, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Thank you for your directly spoken entry, Kudos to you for standing up for what you believe, good luck in my contest, Josie
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It's honest and I admire that. "I could care less about your day". Now that IS bitchy. Better to say nothing and I hope that's what you really mean. But the line is funny!
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Oh my, satirical with saw edged teeth, biting with a forcefield of bravado. Maybe line two instead of at /and? Maybe line three instead of could care less/couldn't care less? Just suggestions as you canvassed for them, not criticisms. The usage of Thou seemed somewhat misplaced as it's the only form of Old English used throughout. Thought provoking that the truth sets you free for sometimes it may do the opposite. Perhaps we all stand up and say what we feel is right but maybe we say it in different ways. Great title btw.
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Great
Love the rhyme ,
It's just sublime.
Good work\
Di
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