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I Should of Known You Would Bring me Heartbreak

I believed you baby
all the things you said
repeated in a soundless
twisted  turn of fate

Should you ever
try to come back
home

my door won't be
open for you
anymore

You were the one
the only
love of my life

and you crushed every
dream we had for
nothing at all.

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7. I Should of Known You Would Bring me Heartbreak

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  • Reanna Eryn
    March 23
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    This is amazing! I can totally relate. Beautiful.


  • Crazy Diamond
    March 2
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    this amazing its exactlly how i have been feeling these days!!


  • Spiritual Soul gold member
    February 5

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    Congrats on the bronze! This is well worthy of it, great writing, it has so much emotion in it awesome job. Great write I liked this a lot!
    Blessings,
    ~Michaela~


  • Mythtress
    February 2

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    Yeah, we all "shoulda" known...but we almost never do. Amazing wording on this. I loved the twists. Write on, poet. congrats on the bronze...well deserved.

    Blessings,
    Myth


  • TheSpiralGenerator
    February 2

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    Congrats on the bronze! This is a great poem, I love the way you took the contest prompt. I can definitely relate to this poem, and I know many others who can as well. Great write!

    Blessed Be,
    -Sadien


  • SaraMaria
    February 2

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    This is a very emotional piece of writing and I believe many readers can relate to the feelings you are expressing. A very good poem


  • untouched pages
    February 2
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    AWW this is so sad.. this is a great write
    ""I believed you baby
    all the things you said
    repeated in a soundless
    twisted turn of fate""

    this is my fave part.. you are a wonderful poet please keep keeping and posting.. I would love to read more of your work!!


  • couldbeworse
    February 2

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    Should you ever
    try to come back
    home

    my door won't be
    open for you
    anymore

    good for you to stand up for yourself in this great piece. i liked it.


  • morgana raven Greeters member
    February 2

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    and you crushed every
    dream we had for
    nothing at all.

    I really loved this last bit, you closed it off really well. Well penned throughout the whole poem and congratulations on the bronze win.
    Laura


  • Shakes-spear
    January 29

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    so sad

    but something we all go through. I have been let down many times in life, but I have also received great love. Good luck to you in the contest, but more so in life! The Shaker


  • Wolf Mistress silver member
    January 29

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    Wow..I loved this...I guess we all have been there once or twice...

    Good luck in the contest
    XXJeannette

  • ImNotTheAnswer
    January 29

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    wow

    This was beautiful, I really loved it. The emotion was so raw, and real. I really loved this part
    "all the things you said
    repeated in a soundless
    twisted turn of fate"

    just stunning

    Thank you for entering love!
    xo

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