In vain
her heart reverberates
a peripheral wound
sketching mirror images
graphically enhanced
by the forsaken kisses.
Her hand incinerates
as passion like a dying moth
succumbs her
~strewn~
like a helpless child,
she picks up the embers
redesigning life
only to end up hurt.
A prick, a thorn
and an exhibition of melancholy
yawning lazily at her destined fate.
Her guardian angel
ageing faster than her
vomitting as the fire
spreads in her womb
as a prayer incantation
begins....
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I picked up the canvas
years later
I could smell her incense
the candles still flicker
the sands still brown
but her morbid soul
creates an ambience
that opiates the memory
which no one remembers.
She lies entombed in my spirit
yet I feel nothing.
Author notes
These are the words I used:
peripheral
sketch
embers
exhibition
child
thorn
moth
yawn
canvas
guardian
sands
prayer
ambience
opiate
Thanks for the inspiration 
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow. Excellent job with the word bank!
14/15 words used.
Great imagery.
Thanks for entering and best of luck!
Write on.
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Thanks for the comment and the words!
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Wow I love the imagery and the words that you use. A really great piece of work.
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thanks a lot for the lovely comment!
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wow I always think that word bank poems can be so hard to write... depends on the words that are picked to use. You did well with this one. I thought the flow was a little off in places but all in all a very well written poem. Thanks for sharing this with us.
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Thanks
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Wow! I loved your word choice and imagery.
This was really beautiful.
However, I felt the background was distracting, and some of the linebreaking could be improved.
All in all, this was a really enjoyable poem!
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Sorry about the background!! I wanted plain but my computer was so slow and I was like whatever comes
Oh! The break in lines was intentional!!
Thanks
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Hummz, nice but broken write, I can hope for yuor good to atleast get bronze :
by
the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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Thanks!! I do love broken writes thoh! It leaves a sense of interpretation!!
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... Oh i totaly suck at word band contest.. I must say you did a great job.. I got chills. and that for me is a good thing. I ususaly get bored if a poem is more than 30 lines but you kept me in the loop the whole time!! I love ""I picked up the canvas
years later
I could smell her incense
the candles still flicker
the sands still brown
but her morbid soul
creates an ambience
that opiates the memory
which no one remembers.
She lies entombed in my spirit
yet I feel nothing."""
This in its self could be a poem... or could have a contest written about it!! good luck! -
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Thanks you!!
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all i can think of is how well done this is.. tho for me
"vomitting as the fire
spreads in her womb
as a prayer incantation
begins...."
is disturbing lol other than that everything just seems mystical in a way. how you weave the words and connect them is just mindblowing xD. -
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LOL ! its a dark write...so what the hell
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Awesome work with this word bank prompt!
Well done, I really love the last stanza in this.
Thanks a lot for sharing it and keep up the
wonderful work here!
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Thanks a lot jeremy!
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Anytime my friend, take care!
Jeremy0826
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You had a bunch of stellar phrases in this poem. My favorite stanza was the fifth. It really created a picture in my mind.
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Thanks aly for the read!
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Her guardian angel
ageing faster than her
vomitting as the fire
spreads in her womb
as a prayer incantation
begins....
outstanding piece!
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Thanks couldbeworse!
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