What a thing of beauty you are
To me, my angel ...
Whisper, I'll listen from afar,
Taking your words to my heart.
My soul was made for searching,
You became the guide,
Fixing all the pains that hearken,
The bleak melody I once abide ...
Until you became my world,
The one I truly wanted,
My angel who I wake up for ...
This is where I belong.
I've listened to your song,
Seen the light that shrouds me now,
I've taken a step back,
To understand this feeling you've given (me).
You are my soothing melody,
The compass to our pathway,
Your scent brings me to that memory,
Where we first swam in the tumultuous sea together ...
Until you became my world,
The one I truly wanted,
My angel who I wake up for ...
This is where I belong.
'You are my dream, my desire,
Everything I've hoped for,
Everything I'll ever need ...
Each word spoken, even in riddles,
Seethes from my heart to you ...
You are my reason for living,
And this new beginning
Is my last test to prove ...
If I am man enough to ask,
Will you be my wife?
To take care of you through this life,
Where not even death can separate
our hearts ...'
For you are my world,
My sanctuary, my love,
My angel who I wake up for ...
Until my last day ...
Author notes
Alright .... thoughts anyone? Come on! ... Instead of calculating the words and the structure to better the subject I wished to write about, this time, I allowed my emotions to fully take me over and this is what came out ...
I am in love ... it's ever so amazing to feel this way! And! ... when you finally realize, 'she is someone I feel I would love to spend my life with' ... and say and feel it without any doubts ... that's when you know you're there, in love ... authentic, genuinely in love ...
GOD I'M BLABBING AWAY! ... h'rm. I'm done for now ...
Ta-ta,
Gabriel
P.S.
Becca ... I love you soo much baby ... so very much.
Be honest ...
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WHAT...THE...F@%*??? Where did my brotha from anotha motha go??? I must admit this is an eye opening piece bro. I stand by you and your decisions. Lord knows I've stood by you during worse...LMAO You sound like a kid in a candy shop in your authors notes to be quite honest. SHUT UP ALREADY!!! lol This was a terrific poem. This is what I try to express. It rolls off your tongue better than it spurts out of my brain. LOL I don't know how you do it but you cease to amaze me. Just when I think I've read your best...you get better...I'd like to say I'm blowing smoke and sunshine up your butt but I'm not. This was a genuinely wholesome heartfelt piece...Did you cheat? LOL Mindblowing again brotha.
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LMFAO! ... ah my best friend in the whole wide world lol .... you make me laugh .... a kid in a candy shop?????? Really?? I don't think I sounded like that .... h'rm .... but you know me too well ... thanks for your comment my brotha! .... and how ould I have cheated? lol bro .... 16 MORE DAYS TILL THE CONCERT!!! YEA!!
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it was quite amazing actualy, I like the effect of the -non revising..? Haha. it was good.
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I like it
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aww this is so sweet!!!! I absolutely love it you did such a wonderful job writing and portraying this beautiful piece ur words are so beautiful and gentle!!!!! I love the details and descriptions in this write!!!!! This is a truly lovely tribute!!!! Thanks for sharing!!!! I
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WHOOOO!!!!
Wonderful - loved it. ^_^ The feeling feels alive, seriously, through that clever rhyme of yours. ;]
Two pointers:
Don't let that love go. (You've no idea what happens when it's gone...)
& keep writing!
May your Muses be with you always, dude!
~Meli♥
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Thank you for your comment Meli ... very much appreaciated ... do not worry, I will not let this love go, nor will I ever stop writing ... the literary world will always have me around in the background or somewhere close by lol ...
Does the feeling come alive for you? Good ... it's good to know that one's love for another can feel alive to a total stranger ... thanks again dear poet!
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Wow, I love romance and you have captured this beautifully my friend. Masterfully done.
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Thank you for the comment dear friend ...
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I can't comment properly. . .just, beautiful. . . . I don't know what it is that I do. . . .just. . . don't let it go my friend. . . never let it go. . . You'll never forgive yourself. . .
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Darkling, thank you for the comment ... your silence, and the emotion that came from it said it all ...
I will never let her go, I've told her many times over ... As you have said, with her, I would never forgive myself ... I'd be dead if I messed my relationship up with Becca ... There would be no reason for living anymoree without her by my side ... thank you for complimenting me by telling me that my friend, much, much! .... appreciated.
Ta-ta
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And not a moment to spare
You touched my heart
When I didn't have a prayer
In my darkest hour with my world filled with gloom
Your sweet love saved me
Not a moment too soon
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When you're standing at the crossroads ,
don't know which path to choose ,
Let me come along ,
cause even if your wrong
I'll stand by you,
won't let nobody hurt you,
I'll stand by you.
always,
becca
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