Todays a day I'll sing the blues
Waitin' on some better news
Todays a day I'll sing the blues
Waitin' on some better news
Well I am
Waitin' on another day
Flyin' to another place
Hopin' for a kinder face
Yeah I'm waitin' on another day
Flyin' to another place
Hopin' for a kinder face
I had a funny dream last night
'bout a wave that brought the tide
I had a funny dream last night
'bout a wave that brought the tide
So I am
Waitin' on another day
Flyin' to another place
Hopin' for a kinder face
Oh sure I'm
Waitin' on another day
Flyin' to another place
Hopin' for a kinder face
Oh todays a day I'll write the blues
Tomorrow bring some better news
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i like the 2 line punch at the end its actualy how i try to end most of mine lol
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Oooh nice, get some muddy bluegrass guitar and you have yourself a hit...
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I can imagine a bluesy guitar and a rich voice singing this...I enjoyed it, as lyrics, this works very nicely. Well done.
Rory
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I'd like to hear it sung
Great song!
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I don't judge poetry and lyrics by the same criterea. I've written both and they are two different animals. As far as poetry goes this is repetitious and simplistic but then, I don't think that you intended this to be read as poetry.
As far as lyrics are concerned it is still repititious and simplistic but that isn't always a bad thing for a lyric. It, in fact, can be a good thing if that is the effect you are going for and it compliments the music of the song. Since this is a poetry contest and since I don't have the benefit of the music that this lyric is supposed to compliment I'll just say thanks for the entry and I'd love to hear the lyrics set to music whenevery you get that part done. -
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Thank you very much for the honest comment. I did in fact write this with my guitar and it works much better that way. Thank you very much for reading anyway and if I ever record the song you will be the first to know.
thanks again
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I could totally here this being sung in my head. Nicely done!!!!!!!!!!!
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Well, I like the repitition in this hopeful rhyme. It could use a little variance in the sentences. Good job. Shancy.
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cool!!! This sound like a song a famous band would play. You're good!
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i heard it!
i could hear the song play out in my mind, very nice!
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Wherever you go, Take the weather with you.
Too much repetition, needs more lyric development, expand your theme. Ask the poem: what, why, how. Give it a go. -
This has a really nice feel to it, a nice laid back go with the flow feel, very interesting, I dont know a great deal about lyrics, but i do know wha i like, and i like this, i would love to hear it with music
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nice blues song
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love the flow, had me singing the blues 2. wicked.
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hmmm, the only comment i can make is WOW!
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Ohhh, I like this one. Would love to hear the music as well, which I know exists. Very nice Miss Vron. Yep, kinda like this one. Good luck in the contest too.
Hugs and love,
Grampa
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I did like this, it had a good flow and I did like the words. You did a good job with this, all the best in the contest.
Take care
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