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Unaware...

Missing image
The fish remained motionless
as the Sunlight penetrated the surface
Shimmering...pulsating with warm vibrant energy
ripples agitated by the winds caresses
The low hum of a distant ships propellors
sending sonic impulses thudding through the water
Marine life..highly sensitive to vibrations
moved gracefully aside
All the while ignoring the alien prescence overhead
unaware of the net closing in on them

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  • Life is a Beach gold member
    January 30
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    Poor old fish....but yummy for us!


  • StarEyes
    January 28

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    Dad,

    What a read! I really enjoyed this, and you are right, it does happen all to often, We tend to forget what they go through! I really like this!
    Great job!

    and love

    Nyetta


    • Celticpoet silver member
      January 28
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      Thanks Nyetta

      Glad you liked this write its a bit of a departure from my usual stuff..but hey...Im pushing myself out there! love n hugs Dad xx


  • Best-to-the-Fall
    January 28

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    wow! i LOVE how this poem is about feeling and texture! it's amazing! most people paint pictures, but this IS feeling! and the way it ends on a menacing note is also fantastic! BRAVO!


    • Celticpoet silver member
      January 28
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      Thank you

      I appreciate your highly observant comment...regards Dan xx

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