Oh beautiful, what were you thinking?
What was going through your head?
Piece by piece I carve
away at your face,
You lay under my blade,
oh for how long I've
been tearing women such as
you apart.
How pleasant it is, most of the time,
to remove the agony
from their life.
But you, my dear...
Why did it come to this?
Was your life too much
to bear?
You forced my hand
as i take your beauty,
your cold flesh lends to me
its secrets as I cut and mold
your flesh, peeling
your skin away,
Only for sheer desire,
your face is torn apart,
Piece by piece,
It has come to this,
you surrender yoru beauty and
your eyes forfeit sight to
my cold scalpal,
I continue carving away,
you lose all recognition,
every identifiable feature of
what was once you, your
beauty now long forgotten,
your blood is on my hands.
What have I done?
I thought I had created
something beautiful,
But now I realize what
took place,
I remade her face at the cost
of her humility,
Her beauty, tarnished
because of this world,
Her face is now perfect,
without a flaw,
but her once radiant insides
are now grotesque,
and match what was once
on the outside.
Is this the price for
playing God?
A contest entry
- ugly, but beautiful by irdefk.
532 points, ended February 26, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think?
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i really like it, i think that you have really made a good point about what changing a person can do, i want to say something more constructive but i really like what you have here
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hmmm, not exactly what I wanted but it's pretty good. Thank you for entering.
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hahaha it does go with the prompt though =P you just have to look at it in just the right way.
its plastic surgery. the man thinks the woman is beautiful regardless of whatever work she wants done on her face, and he comments on how he kille dthe beauty at the end by making her "hot". it works >.> -
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waait you (being Kyle) wrote the poem right???
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of course i wrote it o.O lol
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*sigh* damn it now I'm gonna HAVE to give you a trophy....I was gonna anyways but now I'll feel bad if I don't.
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hahaha you "have" to give me a trophy? why do you "have" to give me a trophy? rofl.
...and shouldn't you be in school? O.o -
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uh I'm homeschooled I can get online while I'm working
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ok well it does go with it. now that you explain it, it does work.
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awesome! i like how you depicted her being torn apart. ^O^
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wow!!!! This was very different and dark and I really liked it! I think it's crazy the way you describe tainting her beauty. Usually a man steals what we have inside... very well penned!!!
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hahaha thanks.
i took the concept of plastic surgery and put it into a poem. idk if people are going to pick up on it though, i need to revise it.
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