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The Friend I Never Had

The friend I thought i had
turned out never to be
how could I even think
that she cared about me?

When she used to came over
Ithought she actually cared
but now it seems to me
that friendship wasn't there.

When I told her I was getting worse
she didn't ask about it or anything
she just sat there and nodded
as if to her it meant nothing.

She never used to ring me back then
it used to kill me more inside
knowing she no longer cared
whether I lived or died.

 

I need her help and support

and needed someone to lean on

shes no longer the friend she was

all I wish is that she'd never gone.

 

 

But now she seems to have changed
she rings a few times a week
but now its me who's given up
I no longer want to act the freak.

She didn't wanna know me
so whats changed now then?
she might be faking it all
I'm not gonna go through that again.

But because I don't want to hurt her
and I know how it feels to be treated that way

when you think someone's your friend

but they dont seem to feel the same way.

 

So we might aswell keep talking to each other
but I'll never be able to confide in her again
I guess it doesnt matter as long as we're friends
i just dont want to go back to how we were back then.

Author notes

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yea so its shit! its true though :'( i cant always be bothered talking to her now cause i tried to talk to her she wasnt bothered i gave up now shes being nice =/

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  • Genz
    July 28

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    I unfortunatly tell you that I can relate to this poem very well....I'm actually going through this right now....

    Very well written, I can see its written with your heart, very raw.

    Nicely done and good luck

  • Jailyn
    February 5

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    wow, I am actually ashamed to admit that this is something I can relate to. I had a friendship that I let fade and now that I try to piece it back together my mate doesnt really want it and, although this is a highly personal and touching piece, i think its something that, sadly, a lot of people will be able to relate to...from either friends perspective.

    I think this was a really raw, emotional piece, and the fact that it is a personal piece just tugs on the heart strings a little bit more. I'm so sorry you had are having to go through this! i hope it all works out..

    your rhyming is also very very strong, without seeming forced or unatural, it has a really really good flow to it. i agree with glad-i-ator when they say that no constructive critism is needed!

    thanks for entering my contest and for sharing your work


  • Anu-Nataraj
    February 3
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    wow
    this is amazing...
    no constructive critic.

    this is pwrfect !!!

  • A-muse-in-writer
    January 29

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    well written personal story here and I can sympathise with the meanings and feelings in here. Well done.