We'd go on walks in the rain,
kiss under the street-lights.
You held me like you wanted me closer,
and looked at me with eyes,
that shimmered
almost as if I lit up your life
god knows you set mine on fire
how could that flame be extinguished
by a little rainstorm?
When our flames could have lasted forever
dancing under street lights;
a little angry storm never could have
burned us out.
Author notes
Another piece of crap for me.
I need to just edit instead of creating stupid lines feelings
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow. That was so incredibly beautiful. It is definitely NOT a piece of crap.
The imagery and emotion were excellent.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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very well done. nice write, i really enjoyed reading this piece of poetry.
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I like it the only tweak I would do would be on the
final two lines. From what you have to
(a little angry storm that never should have
burned us out.)
I think that pretty much sums it up. Life is
like that sometimes...
Hugs...Eddy
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