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walls of jericho



I bid thee farewell, maidens of silvery webs,
whom slumber forbids their wings to cry
as the ravens puncture the evening's sky
with their haste towards Eden's gentle ebb
hovering outside the walls of Jericho.
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Author notes

http://redsigns.deviantart.com/art/Where-Butterflies-Go-To-Sleep-93238038

I honestly tried. lol

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  • new light
    February 5
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    i absolutely love this!


  • LoveDeprived
    February 2

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    just absolutely a spectacular write im not overreacting, its that when i read your words with such good flow its like the words itself have their own life and dancing around happily good take with the prompt..


  • redbarchettadrive gold member
    January 28
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    Fantastic writing Victoria!
    This is surely a winner in my eyes!


  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    January 28

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    I agree with Kat that you did one hell of a job here. You owned this prompt! Well done, and good luck in the contest!

    Laura


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    January 28

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    You did a great job with the prompt. don't be so hard on yourself.. the imagery is outstanding..

    good luck
    kat


  • maralisa silver member
    January 28
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    a nice take on the promt god luck in the contestmaralisa


  • maralisa silver member
    January 28
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    I will come back maralisa

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