The top drawer,
inside pusles the blood of a man
Shattered and splintered.
The second one,
holds his bowels shifted and quivering
Spewing the truth agaisnt your face.
The third one,
holds within the creggy soul of a woman
Lost in this starry eyed gaze known as Humanity.
The fourth and fifth ones....
These little chambers hold a number of things,
hopes, dreams, loss, sanity....
Deliciately lined in silk so they do not get damaged.
The sixth one, you ask?
NO, no...no one can ever see what is in this one.
So watch this extracted being lock this tight.
Ah, finally....
The last one.
Stained in curls, protruding from chipping flesh
Antagonizing all the noses sniffing around.
Stack them up as you wish
this vessel is nothing but an empty shell
Waiting to be filled to the brim
With your nonsense.
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Author notes
tweaks suggested by: MacDad
A contest entry
- PICTURE PROMPT............How do You think? by pdigiddy.
1290 points, ended March 4, 7 entries
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Interesting picture prompt you have wwritten this poem about - can certainly see where all this came from once I saw the picture. Liked the ending - a good conclusion to the other verses.
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Good Effort
I like much of the imagery and the idea behind this piece. I did notice a couple of problems though.
Line 5, "holds his bowels shifted a quivering" is awkward. Did you mean "and quivering"?
Line 8, "in this holds the creggy soul of a woman" is strained. Try "holds within it the creggy soul of a woman". Just a suggestion.
Overall, an excellent beginning.
Keep up the good work!
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Very nice
I like the interpretation very much. I feel that one! Good luck and thanks for entering!
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