We become sentient statues
When we stand still together -
When I sink to your neck,
When I fold to your back,
While we slowly droop,
Wilting our last moments away.
Author notes
Gillian -Noelle
A contest entry
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Short, but not short on imagery. Well done.
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Another...
.... fine entry into my challenge. This brought to mind old vampire stories for me. I loved it, as I am working on a book of nothing but Vampire Poems as my second book to be put our in 2011
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Gosh,I'd never even noticed how this piece could be referencing vampires. And it my own poem and me a vampire fan.
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Wow! This is so romantic. I love how it just flows and makes you smile.
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I love your imagery here
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thanks for entering
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First things first, I love the imagination in this poem. Especially comparing two people to flowers. The last line had to be my favorite part, "Wilting our last moments away." Honestly it's a bit short for my taste but it's one of the better shorter poems I've read. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!
~ToxicSuicide.
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