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ehipassiko

serving two masters
the blossoming wild flowers
grace my horse’s breath

 

 

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Author notes

The title means “come and see” in Pali; the language of Buddhist scripture.

Prompt: Zen Poetry

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  • Swan song gold member
    February 15
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    Nice!!! as long as the wild flowers were sweet lol

    good hiaku feel to this


  • Ithica silver member
    February 15
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    I think you nailed this one... Bravo!!!


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    February 2

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    Beautifully Intoxicating!!

    Thank you for sharing this brilliant masterpiece, overflowing with Zen!! Wishing you all the best. Peace, xx Cyn


  • Myjoy gold member
    January 30

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    I love this, it's like a breath of fresh air, thank you for sharing lovely.


  • Pure Thought silver member
    January 28
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  • Desire gold member
    January 28

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    Wow~

    Oh My~ This is one Powerful piece Beautiful and I read it several times~ and wanted to just lay down in a pasture- without a watch
    Loved this!!
    Excellent as always~ Woot!
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Voice~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes in the contest too
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • And Hyetal
    January 28

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    I love all the imagery you've put here. Everything is so effective even though this is such a short form. I love your last line.



    ~Cassie


  • Paloszoo gold member
    January 28

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    The title just draws the reader in and the poem grabs 'em by the heart. Stunning imagery and form. Good luck in the contest!


  • Rovingone gold member
    January 28

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    This poem just paints a picture of serenity when you let it whisper through your mind. So very tranquil and smooth as a river of silk.


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    January 28

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    I adore your form poetry...I would love to take the time to learn some of this. Your poems are so wonderful!

    'sssssssss


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    January 28
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    Good grief. THAT's zen!


  • Tirrell
    January 28

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    You have a knack for beautiful poetry, and I love this one. I love the metaphor, depth and grace. It reminds me much of a book of Tao poetry that I have. It gets to the root, and heart of many matters. This one speaks to me in my darkness.
    Thank you.


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    January 28
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    ABSOLUTELY FANTABULOUS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YOU DID A LOVELY JOB SIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!


  • StarEyes
    January 28

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    Hmmmmm, Not sure I have ever seen this "Zen Poetry" before... You sure make it look easy sis. You do amaze me...

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


    • Amera gold member
      January 28
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      aww... thanks Sis. It's like a Haiku or Senryu; syllable count 5/7/5 but instead of just an image the first two lines pose a question and the last line answers it.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    January 28

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    Very deep and thoughtful poetry.

    A different discipline for you, and well handled

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