With Hamlet and with Guildenstern as boys
We thought that love would never be for us
It's not the sort of thing a boy enjoys
And girls can make a dreadful lot of fuss
But I've been cured of cynical detachment
I've seen the light and I am always yours
You've won me with your wonderful attachment
You're everything the modern man adores
Oh Rexel you're the early morning light
Your long arm lets you reach to light the way
What you have joined is held together tight
Oh won't you join yourself to me today?
So lovingly I'd fill you up with staples
And take you on a honeymoon to Naples!!
Author notes
Sorry about that but I'm a Shakespeare addict, I trust Guildenstern and the ghost of the Prince won't be too sad to lose their schoolfriend but a happy marriage is clearly in the making ...
I am unhappy with the attachment/detachment feminine rhyme, it is a little too heavy and too rich for me, looking for an alternative.
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A contest entry
- Project Literacy: Shakespeare by aeolia.
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Bronze trophy winner
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this was hilarious throughout, but the couplet made me spit tea all over my desk! thanks a lot! girls are such a bother; i might as well start caressing my roommate's stapler... oh, how it beckons. XD
i see what you mean about the feminine rhyme in the second stanza. it does kind of stick out, but your rhyme is done well, as is your metre. i'm not sure how you could change that, though; if i think of something and you care to hear it, i'll let you know.
thank you so much for the entry, and sorry about the wait in judging!
-endymion
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oh dear!
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Oh you bugger! YOU did Rosencrantz and the stapler TOO!
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Was the only option I was given!
I'm not happy with it though. -
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Oh stop complaining!
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Shakespeare penned in contempoary language. To my ear, using old language would soften the feminine rhymes but all and all it's a wonderful read.
Love,
Amera♥
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