In a place east of here, the night crashes down,
the gloom fills up the streets, blackness smothers the town.
There is never an evening, nor fading of light,
but simply immediate, inescapable, night.
The people who live here aren’t out after four,
they just hide in their homes, a bar on the door.
And yet, to a watcher, nothing seems to be wrong
but it’s shadows they fear, and the shadow’s dark song.
For the shadows here sing, and if you’re on the street,
then their song, it will call you, seductive and sweet.
But you cannot resist, you will not stay still,
and the shadows will lure you, embrace you, and kill.
To the place called Medoma, this fear-stricken town,
with tales of the shadows, comes unwanted renown.
And since nothing has worked, and they still have this blight,
if you go to Medoma, beware of the night.
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Written February 18th, 2004
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i used to live in skagway alaska and in alaska you get the whole dark much longer and light much longer depending on the seasons, and its an old town where many died in the gold rush. i have walked its streets at night and been a little creapped out as i walked, where in the day time no one would ever harm you but at night its no fun after dark. but only if your as sensitive as i am to that supernatural kind of thing, what is it about a place that leaves its psyic fengerprints for us to run into? this poem made me go back to those creepy chilling nights when i was out after dark. very clever. but i am not sure where the town is from your poem but i would like to perhaps see if its as creepy at night as skagway is. now i am in portsmouth in the uk and i have been down to its dock lands at night and they have those creepy ghosts of the time when the docks were a violent bloody place. now really there is nothing there that would hurt me but it still makes me want out of there faster than lightning.
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no its not, i made it up
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Medoma: this is not a real town, correct? Please contact me with a responce in the near future so I can judge accordingly. Thank you.
-Courtney -
Though your flow is a tiny bit shaky in places this is an excellent poem. Your lines hold such beauty. You've done well.
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WOW! Very nice write with some fantastic lines there. A great idea and you carried it through extrmemly well with excellent rhyming and just a couple of small places of uneven rhythm. Good job - going to have to read more of your things, that's for sure.
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WOW! I love this. It seems to me that too aften people either have something that rhyms yet has no passion or soul, or they put plenty of soul in it but never bother to make it sound nice. I should know, I do it too. Anyway, I love the fact that you put both of these into this piece. Great job and keep it up.
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This is a great poem, I like it
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Creative write... and what a catchy piece... This is talented writing ...
For the shadows here sing, and if you’re on the street,
then their song, it will call you, seductive and sweet.
But you cannot resist, you will not stay still,
and the shadows will lure you, embrace you, and kill.
That is my Fave part... your word choice is awesome... i loved how it just flowed so well.. keep up the awesome work yo!!!! peace out .. DreamR -
You made the name up, it sounds like something I would do. Isn't it great when you build the world in your head and it becomes so real on paper that people ask "where is it." I enjoyed the slight thill of aprehension and the rhythm and flow of this poem.
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Wow, this is a very unique piece and I really, really like it! I like the rhyme to it and it reminds me of the greek sirens. Amazing write and keep up the awesome work! ^_^
~Nobody~ -
Excellent
WOW!
I love this.
You did an excellent job.
I love how you came up with a name of a town out of nowhere.
Hey, love the pic for your opening page.
Again, great write.
*S* Cynthia -
hmm, Medoma. I just made it up to fit with the rhythm. Didn't come from anywhere in particular. Thanks for your comment!
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this is really cool...and excuse my ignorance...but wear did the town name Medoma come from?...wherever it came from...it fits really well with the overall tone of this piece...it sounds like something i would write...although...i dont think i would have been able to put it in such great words...good job...keep writing...
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