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Shades of Green




I walk past the shades of green
fearing the last words
of an incomplete song
        ....my subtle imagination.


I shudder like a little child
hurt on its tiny finger
holding agony in moribund cliches
decorated with solemn promises
  kisses and hugs.

~Ah!  I do remember
those old shades of green~





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  • morgana raven Greeters member
    February 9, 2009
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    Hmm, I'm not to sure about this there is something I don't feel from it. It was worded and displayed well but there is something missing in it for me. You used very good description and language and overall it is a good poem, I just don't feel it.
    Thanks for entering.
    Laura


  • mysticstorm gold member
    January 30, 2009

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    I simply love this...memories to never be forgotten...excellent write...

    thank you for entering!

    mystic


  • honey bear silver member
    January 29, 2009

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    a sad and longing write,filled with memories of lost friendships and love, a very whistful read my friend, keep up the good work and thank you for sharing sorry i have no points for applauds.


  • DecorusApparatus
    January 28, 2009

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    What a stunning poem!
    I absolutely LOVE your use of language, wonderfully complex and descriptive.
    "holding agony in moribund cliches"
    Fantastic line right there.
    Keep up the excellent work!!

    --Stardust x

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