Onyx walls and jade stones
lie deep in the cotton fog
floating on a buttermilk sky ~
moats of silver lining
hovering in the summer breeze
leave me to envision
beryl streams;
and lucid dreams
aloft towers of vacant rooms
for vacant souls
whom gently shift through
air castles
lost eternally within the boughs
of my illusive reverie.
Author notes
ignis fatuus - Latin for Something that misleads or deludes; an illusion.
Yay done editing!
A contest entry
- Random Thought by Beverlynohime.
500 points, ended February 12, 2009, 15 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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wow that was really cool i love the pic too that was a very fasintaing narritive to it. I like the latin always cool to learn something new. I won't remember that but it is cool to know
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"towers of vacant rooms/for vacant souls - a nice echo of Emily Dickinson here. I enjoyed the imagry and detail in this piece. "illusive reverie" indeed.
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of course I'd read the poem with the Latin name This was really good Kerri. i'm not sure i quite got the meaning but the imagery is perfect You seem like you've become a betetr poet.
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It reads to me as a soft, quiet peaceful piece, read slowly, pensively even where every word is inhaled, mulled over and then slowly exhaled again.
You may wish to punctuate it a tad more to achieve this effect a bit better, but thats my personal choice pet, it will still have that effect regardless, beautiful work here.
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I love this.
its such a wonderful poem
i adore the line "aloft towers of vacant rooms
for vacant souls"
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This is gorgeous poetry! I'm completely spellbound with every word you've used! Wonderfully word choices!!!
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i dont understand half of the words in here but it is still good
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lol seriously? hmm.
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i got them now i looked them up
like almost every word
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Ignis fatuus?
If my Latin is correct, I think it literally means "foolish fire."
Lol. But I suppose that does make sense, in a way.
Nice poem as usual.
<3
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Beautiful words to describe, well done. Blessings.
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ignis fatuus is what my bf must've been... this was a beautiful write as always!
Peace and Love
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