fifteen days
thirty kisses
forty five dances
seventy I love you's
Captured and framed
for visitors to codone our folly.
We ran away like strangers
still roped forever
creating solace necklaces
~all fake~
surrendering heartless love
into an abyss.
And these days all I do
is hear and feel my body shudder
to a broken record
cluttered over my dying body.
Author notes
This is about a relationship gone bad!!! The word clutter inspired me to talk about a woman whose life though with people is still cluttered with feelings of sadness and loneliness
A contest entry
- Quickie Time! Word Prompt - Clutter - 10-50 Words by Kari.
525 points, ended January 27, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow, beautiful work here!
I cant believe that you only got an HM
for it. Keep up the wonderful work here
and thanks a lot for sharing it!
Jeremy0826 -
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Well...Thanks for saying that
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Wow, this reminds me of the jumbled
thoughts that spin around my mind!
Very well done. Congratulations on
winning the shiny!
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Thanks aunt!
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I really like the format and how you have made it fit the poem and the prompt. This is very deep.
Thanks for your entry and the best of luck to you in the contest.
Kari -
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thanks for the comment and the HM!
~pri
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Still trying to get my head around this one.... not a very long poem, indeed, but there is a ton there to digest. It's a nice write....I particularly like "surrendering heartless love/ into an abyss" Well done.
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dont blame you
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