Unknown
unheard
sweet rickety dreams
enveloping seven colors
mild, warm and cool
reverse aura severed those tones
scattering soul into beams of solitude.
~false ceiling~
falls and she hopes
that the plaster never breaks..again.
Author notes
Plaster here is a metaphor to fake identity!!
A contest entry
- Pick a word - Write a poem in 10 LINES or Less (P) by The Fun House.
1050 points, ended February 22, 42 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This one reaches me on many levels. I really like the spiritual aspects of it and the metaphors for life/spirituality entwined. This one gets deep if you delve there and I admire that. Wonderfully penned.
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Merry meet,
What an interesting concept you have developed. I love this line:
"that the plaster never breaks..again."
I think I would add another dot between "breaks...again". I do believe that it is more grammatically correct (of course I could be completely wrong here)....
Have you noticed that most of the poems in this contest are minimalistic in the choice of words used?
good luck in the contest.
Amythest
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well..I really didnt know the grammatical rule for dots
but I will correct it 
What do you imply by minimalistic?
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