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Paladin




As it was in days of yore,
a chance encounter could sometimes score,
some hapless lass in dire straights waiting,
her shining rescue from dragons baiting.

Alas, where have the knights all gone?
They died before the festive bon ton.
And we are left with Snidely Whiplash,
while Dudley's trains burns from the crash.

And so it seems it never fails,
we long for Camelot's lost tales.




©2009
1-27-09



Author notes

Written for the contest: Contest Pick a word - Write a poem in 10 LINES or Less (P) by The Fun House
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2435035

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  • arnal
    July 18

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    A very nice rhyme the music is flawless and like the way you ended the poem with that thought,enjoyed


  • Amythest Moonjade
    February 23

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    Merry meet,

    Congratulations on winning the Gold. As I said before, I really liked the poem and it was deserving and a perfect example that no matter how much you know, there is allways something else to learn.


    Amythest


    • Elrenia
      February 23
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      Thank you. I really had no expectations of winning, I just love a challenge; and with so many entries, I just wrote it and let it go.

      And, I do like a bit of teaching with my poems, as much as I like learning.


  • Draig aine gold member
    February 22
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    congratulations on the gold

    an excellent write


  • The Fun House silver member
    February 22

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    Par excellence! I love the way you've spun this. The rhyme is well done, the tale is keen and I have enjoyed this most fully. Take a bow, it is far worth of it


    • Elrenia
      February 22
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      Thank you for your kind words. I am glad you enjoyed it.

  • Amythest Moonjade
    January 30
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    Merry meet,

    I love poems about "knights of yore".  I'm not sure I understand this line:

    "They died before the festive bon ton."

    I'm not sure I know what a festive bon ton is. Regardless I do like this poem. Good luck in the contest.


    Amythest

    • Elrenia
      January 30
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      The "ton" was the high society of Regency England. By then, the knights were history. I just meant that they were long gone before the sixteenth and seventeenth centuries. Hope this clears it up.

      • Amythest Moonjade
        January 31
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        Merry meet,

        Thank you for clearing up that little mystery for me. I'm a Medevial Historian and for some reason, I have never heard that term. I love learning new things. Thanks again.


        Amythest


  • Violet Moodswing Greeters member
    January 28

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    Loved it and yes we do. Of course, my idea of the knight in shining armor has changed a bit over the years. So what if the armor is a little rusty if there is a quality knight on the inside right? Glad I stopped by to read

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