When midwinter nights are freezing,
And the fire’s unappeasing,
In the midnight dark I wander
Underneath the falling snow.
Ice is cold, but hearts are colder,
Kindness lost and left to moulder,
Making houses close and gloomy
Smothering their inner glow.
All the village lights have faded,
One by one they all were shaded,
And there’s no one in the lane
Whom I might meet and bid “Hello.”
Water crystals sparkle brightly;
All around me drifting lightly
In an opalescent flurry,
Pale in the moonlight’s glow.
Nothing breaks the soothing silence;
There’s no hint of pain or violence--
Just wind-breath that creaks the branches
And the flutter of the snow.
Finger-winds of winter gales
Grasp the clouds and part their veils,
So the light is unabated
And the world is all aglow.
Skies of netted diamond fires
Swing above the inky spires
Of the treetops looming leafless
Casting shadows on the snow.
Twists of wind grow ever crisper
In my ear a whistling whisper
Rushing on; its wild wail
Echoes sadness that I know.
All around, the world is freezing,
But the silence proves appeasing
And the chill that’s in my marrow
Starts to thaw amid the snow.
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WOW! I love the imagery and the emotion. This is just an amazing poem...very beautiful.
"Skies of netted diamond fires
Swing above the inky spires
Of the treetops looming leafless
Casting shadows on the snow."
Just amazing! I don't know what to say except W-O-W!
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This is a very emotional poem, but somehow it's peaceful and tranquil at the same time. The winter imagery that flashes through my head as I read this poem is beautifully inspiring.
"Twists of wind grow ever crisper
In my ear a whistling whisper
Rushing on; its wild wail
Echoes sadness that I know."
This really tuggest at my heart; the pain and the loneliness in this stanza captured so much beauty in amidst the sadness.
I wish you the best of luck, and keep writing and improving your poetry. ^__^
Aeris Silverlight
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A very beautiful poem
Such wonderful imagery -
This is very captivating, and I enjoyed it thoroughly
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verry nice.this was very beautifull!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Where to start? I love winter and winter scenery. When I see it, I am captivated by the very things that you have put into your poem. The images you have incorporated are beautiful. My favorite is:
All the village lights have faded,
One by one they all were shaded,
And there’s no one in the lane
Whom I might meet and bid “Hello.”
To me it represents beauty, peace, and solitude.
Great job.
Mike
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LOVE IT
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I really like your rhyme pattern here and you paint a vivid image.
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