I am drowning
in silent screams( a voice thats forgotten).
No one hears
them because
they dont care.
There is despair
blooming in me now.
What are you going
to do for me now?
Can you hear
my screams( a dieing voice)?
Or do you not care
about me anymore?
I dont care about
you anymore.
Author notes
the idea came to me from the song Violet by The Birthday Massacre
A contest entry
- Dark Poems (But theres a catch.......) by xmiasmatik.
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Comments
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Sometimes the screams that cannot be heard are the screams that cannot be seen. If no one hears or sees them then it is difficult to define whether or not "they" care. If the narrator no longer cares why do they ask if they are still cared for. I think that this could be stronger with a "FEAR" attitude, "I don't care about you, F**K YOU!"
good luck in the contest,
Peace
Fear was an awesome band from the past.
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Good job and good luck.
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Wow. I like the emotion, the general metaphor of being trapped and dying to being ignored by the one you love.
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Wow this is really good.
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