today
I'm infuriated
can't eat
can't sleep
slurred speech
life's a peach
cut's not deep
feels incomplete
I'm exasperated
today
Please tell me what you think
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I can't tell how I feel about this, though I suppose that doesn't matter. The very fact that the lines are choppy and the rhyme seems forced almost adds to the "attitude" of the overall point. I mean, you're infuriated, right? That's why I'm torn. I'm glad to see you writing again.
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Why so blue? I'm blue too. I understand but two blues don't make a happy face. So I liked the poem but it's time to cheer up.
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