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Eyes that make the stars fall.

Staring at your luscious red lips,
your big brown eyes,
your wavy crimson curls,
makes the snow fall from my frozen heart,
and the tears melt in my frosty eyes.

I can feel again.

When you smile,
the stars fall from my sky,
i would catch every single one,
to hear the beauty of your voice once more.

You have my heart,
don't tare it apart,
because i can't help but love you,
and will,

forever and a day.

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option2~ wordbank

snow, catch, stars, red

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  • Dobar Dan
    May 15

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    Came here to return the favour

    Very nice piece of poetry young lady - congrats on the silver trophy win - I like the way the poem flows and the imagery great - keep on keeping on - Bless God - Joe ---------------------------------- xxx


  • NooNiThEWitcH
    February 28

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    This is very beautiful and sweet.

    Just a typo, it's "tear" and not 'tare'

    great job and congrats on the well earned Silver Trophy!!

    Keep it up!
    Nooni


  • transit
    January 30

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    aaww

    This poem absolutely hits the target and made me feel warm inside. The feelings are simple and the imagery is awesome! The snow is not literal and that was amazing! Good luck!

    ~transit~