maybe you don't know it
but i will say it again
i'll say i love you
but i can't say it in your face
sometimes i think you do
but you're not really interested
you care about who is around you
instead of caring of yourself
but if you don't care about your happiness
who will take that?
i would if you let me out
but you prefer to be alone
now i blame myself for you
for not knowing what i had
but it was something i never got
something called "intentions"
i made the choice
but i missed a chance
of being happy
for the rest of my life
A contest entry
- .:. Take My Breath Away .:. by DecorusApparatus.
1400 points, ended April 14, 42 entries
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Simple, straightforward and clear.
Nice.
Thanks for entering this into my contest. -
fabulous!
aww sweet heart, who is this your talking about? coz i'll go over to where you live and kick her lilly ass if shes not intrested in you, jeez whats wrong with people!? i dont get it how can someone hurt you like that? omg fuck! i loved the poem and thought it was well writen and emotional, but c'mon whos this chick? i'll kick her ass, i told you i would people dont know what their missing out on, i promise you that baby i really do.
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wow. this is reely good.
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i can really relate to diz poem i really hope u keep doin these poems. they are really good and u may have a furture in writing poems
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Really like the flow of this poem and the lyrics, it's very honestly worded and capturing. I really felt alot of the emotion you were trying to get across, trying and succeeding that is = ]
"but it was something i never got
something called "intentions" "
Loved those lies, had a real clarity to them.
Keep up the excellent writing my friend!!
--Stardust xx
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Great
I love this poem i feel like this sometimes and so does the special person in my life but its the thing like this that keeps us apart
Great write
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