The doctor enters with the results of my MRI
He says they're positive, my only question is why?
My girlfriend tries to hold my shaking hands as I cry
but there's no use, it's time to kiss the future goodbye
So long, to all the great things I could've done
They're gone, my life's over and it never begun
To mom, I'm gonna miss the family a ton
But be calm, Saying goes only the good die young
Now my life's nothing but a ticking bomb
I'm sick of thinking every morning is today my time
Is this my last breath, or my first taste of death
So what's left, When will the Lord cometh?
I'm tired of all these prayers and constant suffering
Treatments got me stressing, time to count my blessing
Mom swears, it's OK you will be well again
But I think I'm well on my way to heaven
Hooked up to these machines from toe to head
Stuck lying here, in my hospital bed
Everyone's staring like I'm already dead
Need words of comfort but receive silence instead
My only fear is darkness I look forward to light
My only prayer is to see St. Peter tonight
I've lost the care, I've lost the will to fight
I can't bear the lies that I will be alright
I let go, release my soul, and float away
Nurses rush in, but they can't save me
Just know at all times my love stayed true
And when the time comes, I'll be there waiting for you.
Samuel Vincent Del Pidio
Author notes
Not a true story. Had a writing assignment where we had to write our own obituary, well i took it one step further and put myself in the position of someone who was recently diagnosed with a terminal illness. Tried my best to reflect the emotions that I would mostly likely feel in that situation. Hope you enjoy.
I also made this into a song where the 2nd verse is the chorus.
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Comments
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well done! this was sad but it was heart felt and passionate . . . a little rhythm work woulf help to improve the piece but other wise it realli draws the reader in to the feeling and intensity of the message. it's lengthy but nowhere near wordy and it takes the reader on a journey of simple, shadowed sorrow.
kudos on a great write.
Maggie -
Sad.
Death from cancer is never pretty, or fun. You've expressed that very well, your rhyme is spot on. The outcome could be different, but no guarantee ever, is there?
Love,
jin
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I was feeling very sad, and wanted to wish you comfort and long life, but your author note cleared that up, making it obvious that you are excellent at capturing an emotional tenseness ... this is very well done and I am totally glad you have written some fiction here
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This is really a moving piece, and I really like how you ended it. Glad to here it's just a story and not based on anything personal. Nice to see you back here and writing again.
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awww you did a fantasic job with this love. The emotion was so raw, and real. I loved it, and am gald to hear it's not about you
yet another great write
xo
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you are truly my greatest fan and it brings me so much joy knowing you actually love to read my poems. I don't consider myself an awesome writer but your confidence definitely inspires me to keep writing. Thank you so much beautiful!
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I really do love your writing, it inspires ME to keep writing. You have so much emotion in your words, it's beautiful
xo
Randi
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