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And Me, Of Course

I've got every letter

That one needs to spell

D-E-S-P-E-R-A-T-I-O-N

But in my going,

I tend to pass by an offer; refused I say.

And after that day I looked back,

Seeing that if perhaps the father had called

Maybe even left a message

Then I wouldn't be a failure

In the run-away.

But what life is there to lvoe when it

Is all spent on

Los Angeles

New York

Paris

And Jerusalem?

Oh...

And me of course

For every life

I hope that I

Can look into their eyes

Knowing they can't see mine

They can't see my

Letters that I spell

So perhaps, with that,

They will know

Don't follow an island mind

One track leads to endings planned

While the wandering road

Splits and splits at splits

And your endings are chosen

By your desgreasion

Author notes

Dr. Cube (The name derives from somewhere else, but it's meaning is that of a character with an 'Island Mind' A mind and personality trapped in one setting, never to run free.)

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  • xDemonicxAngelx
    February 18, 2009

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    I loved this, it was very deep and I loved the way it was set out. You did a great job with this one. Thank you for entering and good luck.

    Take care


  • Lady Juliet
    February 10, 2009
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    Wow- very deep


  • Raining Kisses gold member
    February 4, 2009
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    wOW THE DEPTH IN THIS POEM IS ENCAPSULATING, i LOVE EVERYTHING ABOUT IT. IT IS SIMPLY FANTASTIC


  • couldbeworse
    February 2, 2009
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    Don't follow an island mind

    One track leads to endings planned

    While the wandering road

    Splits and splits at splits

    And your endings are chosen

    By your desgreasion

    banging job!!! (that means great lol) anyway, loved your style and form here. it was creative, imaginative. loved it!


  • FollowingFate
    January 31, 2009

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    You had a typo: "But what life is there to lvoe when it" lvoe=love ... other than that, I see no errors. The last half that's on the right side got a little confusing, but only cuz it's deep and makes you think. It's a cool poem, I like it. But what does desgreasion mean?


    • Cube
      January 31, 2009
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      Should be spelled 'Desgression'. I didn't have much time to type this one up so I have a few errors in spelling.

      Otherwise, it means angst or self pity.


  • Deathless1
    January 28, 2009
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    i would have to say the same.

  • couldbeworse
    January 27, 2009
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    cant wait to see yours. hurry up and write already hahah lol.

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