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Christ,

Christ, do you know how i died for you?
how i died for your sins?
Christ,
what did i do to save your name.
it's not the traditional story,
Judas is nailed to the cross
and the mob turned against him.
Christ, you loved a harlot.
and what they don't know about the lady in red
was that it was me
Christ,
Judas was your harlot
you may be all knowing
but, Christ you were blind
i died for your sins
was nailed to the cross
Christ, it was so easy to betray you
Mary was your Magdaline
but i'm your jaded mandarine.

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  • ArrowCobain
    January 27
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    i was his right hand man, all along.


  • crystalmeth
    January 27
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    I love this concept !
    Very creative, lady in red.
    My favorite line was the last I think,
    "Mary was your Magdaline,
    but I'm your jaded mandarine" very very nice rhyming there, m'am.

    "Listen, Jesus, I don't like what I see.
    All I ask if that you listen to me.
    And remember, I've been your right-hand man, all along"

  • ArrowCobain
    January 27
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    JUST A JADED MANDARINE
    A JADED MANDARINE
    A JADED JADED FADED JADED JADED MANDARINE

    EVERYTIME I LOOK AT YOU I DON'T UNDERSTAND
    WHY YOU LET THE THINGS YOU DID GET SO OUT OF HAND
    YOU'D HAVE MANAGED BETTER IF YOU'D HAD THIS PLANNED..
    AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH