ebony
please
he said
voice of sorrow
meant to draw
the chains that
bound her to
his misery
not this time
enough
ebony had pleased
him long enough
endured
the disapproval
pain and promise
spilled from liar's lips
perhaps he meant well
or truly loved too much
for self control
perhaps she was
fataly flawed
anger management
overload
body battered
heart shattered
thoughts scattered
but spirit never broken
she took one more step
and then another
until the tears
could be heard
no more
ebony
please
he said
not this time
enough
A contest entry
- Immerse yourself in a new persona #3 [FULL] by Miss Faerie.
400 points, ended January 31, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Reader interpretation and critical comment welcomed
Comments
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I have to say, you really did a great job here captivating your readers, me for sure, within each passing vivid line. And it's hard for some to get to the actual point of leaving sometimes I think, because they think little of themselves to think they may deserve more. I'm glad you brought this topic to light, it would do good for many to read this and know that there is hope, and some that are abused in any form can move forward, and it starts along those lines of which you've stated. Not This Time, Enough.
Thanks for sharing you, shine on sweet soul! 
Timothy aka poeticweaver~
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I love it.
We all have to get to a point where there is just not enough in it anymore and we stand up for ourselves.
This is effective, I like the conversational tone it worked well.
Thank you for entering my contest and good luck
Shari
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wow what a powerful read to come back to, the feelings this stirred in me so many and its so simply wrote an elegant piece which flows like tears this is a deep pain and an amazing poem
abigail
formerly known as heart on sleeve
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