Slipping through the net of night
Go sleep spoken words uncaptured
Now drifting in the ethers
As the eternal unheard echoes
Of roving slumberous minds.
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amazing
wow...amazing write..
loved d imagery and i appreciate ur talent..
good job!
congrats for d bronze..u deserved it..
take care
~Parth.
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wow.. this is amazing!! fantsatic imagery and great use of poetic device.. i am very impressed indeed!
thanks for entering my contest!
and best of luck to you!!
your judge,
-Lemon Bee-
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thanks for entering
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You do write poetic ripples that flow
though our thoughts, they ebb and flow
to ride with and understand more again
and again.
The branches may weep but in time
they always bloom again.
I don't feel I can give you any good
constructive criticism, don't interrupt
the ripples.
artie
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Yes, another good poem
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I love the imagery you incorporated into this poem! Your word choice also added much to the imagination, it made it incredibly easy to picture these free flowing, timeless words of those heading off to slumber land... I very much enjoyed this piece!
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Very good.
You have capture the whispers in the night.
Thank you.
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Beautiful.
Do not revise this! It is perfect! Please keep up the great work. KJC
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Wonderfully creative!
"Slipping through the net of night...
Now drifting in the ethers
As the eternal unheard echoes"
These words gives me the personification of a lullaby in place of the sandman. Putting people to sleep
i love it!
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