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Sudden Death

They were right,
It would be over quick,
Quicker than I thought,
The pain never seemed to come,
But I knew it had happened,
For it all went black,
As the bullets struck me dead

Author notes

Written for a Titles contest.
Had to keep it short as I was in college at the time I wrote it.

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Comments


  • WarmHeartedGeisha
    January 28

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    Thats a very interesting write, I like the length 2, its just long enough 2 get the point across. Great job. Thanks 4 entering

    Take Care

    ~Lorissa~


  • n1peacebaby
    January 27

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    I like how its short and to the point.
    Its interesting how you describe a death, its something different.

    I like it!


  • shiratikva
    January 27

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    It's a very interesting write.
    Nobody knows what the death exactly is.
    You depict great image about it. It's ''went black'' for sure. Good luck in the contest!
    Much love!
    Karina