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Each Contemporary Day

Sitting alone next to a rain splattered window
As the clouds dissolve into an archetype of grey
When I think of your smile I can't help but cry by myself
Only another cordial moment on each contemporary day

Knowing something that says all there's left to live for is love
But it rarely gives that simple joy away
A tangle of statements among lonely independence
Maybe that is why I deny unbelief

I see that who I am makes my heart seem controlling
Gateway to a soul where the rage never stops
But I cannot stop the warm tears that cascade down from my eyes
As I smash the glass ceiling with a warm embrace

The Spirit is there to catch my shattered tears
Picking me up so there aren't any tracks left in my wake
Maybe a gift will arrive as my eyes dry in a new sun
Something that is different from each contemporary day

















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A response to contemporary culture

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  • amaranthine lover gold member
    March 3
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    very deep thanks for entering


  • Walking Oxymoron gold member
    February 22

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    The rhyme scheme started well, but then you lost it...

    I see that who I am makes my heart seem controlling
    Gateway to a soul where the rage never stops
    But I cannot stop the warm tears that cascade down from my eyes
    As I smash the glass ceiling with a warm embrace

    That was my favourite stanza...
    I relate so well to it, and it has some amazing lines!


  • DeathtoloveShade gold member
    February 20
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    I absoutely loved it

    this is really good :0 keep on writing s


  • Serenity-words
    February 16

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    Beautiful write

    I love the expression, as well as the metaphors that you wrote so beautifully. Great job, and thank you for entering.

  • HollyLouise
    February 16

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    This is written beautifully. you use such discriptive metaphors it creates brilliant imigery. I love it for this reason.

    Thank you for sharing.

    Holly.


  • Papers
    February 10

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    I liked this one. It really describes your emotions in a sophisticated kind of way. The imagery was beautiful, as well as some of your metaphors. I'm very pleased with this, keep up the great work!

  • Judith Chandler
    February 10
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    I'm trying to decide if those feelings of rage and sadness are simple or complex!

    I do very much like the thought in the last stanza that a gift might arrive to make this contemporary day different. That always does for me as the mail comes and there is something there for me, unexpected. Maybe you mean it metaphorically but that would be okay too.

  • Elric Brothers
    February 3
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    That was so beutiful. It flowed nicely and was just all around amazing. Great job!

  • BHolzner gold member
    January 29

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    Bravo!

    The pain and tears of requited love are softened by
    the passing of each day. The tears of strengh given as a gift of inner spirit are renewed.
    Just lovely!
    Betsy Holzner


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    January 29
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    This is so very well written!!! Very beautifully portrayed!!!! It is very sad but lovely still


  • The odd one
    January 29
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    Huuun. This one makes me really sad..

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