Spending nights spilling hot tears,
physical and emotional remoteness she hardly bears.
She was the other woman from the very beginning,
but suffering and jealousies she never saw coming.
Her love for him was incredible but jealousy was more,
she burns inside and screams her love to the core.
Breathing the same air as the other was agonizing,
sharing the same love and man was terrorizing.
Many a time she thought to end her own life,
Instead she was tempted to end the other woman's
life.
In her dream scenarios and wishes of death are appealing.
Praying that the other disappears, while she would be healing.
Trauma could be utterly fatal making her pray to infirmity.
She believed he would be there beside her for the eternity.
Aloof and insensitive he became, favoring distant cold calls.
Where all that love has gone, spoken in the promises' halls?
In a moment of awakening she carves out that devotion,
from her bleeding heart to the burial ground with deep emotion.
All their memories, good and bad, down she tore,
took off the weakness and mourning attire she wore
more glamorous than ever she blossomed and radiated allover,
In her pursuit he went with the fresh burning passion of a lover.
With her new tenacity and apathy she looks at him in wonder,
her heart and doors to him are bolted, no passion found to bolster.
Her newly found dignity and feelings of superiority are overwhelming,
Stepping away from him, a great love she was, he will forever be regretting.
Author notes
The other woman is a repeating issue and will be repeating forever and ever.
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Her newly found dignity and feelings of superiority are overwhelming,
Stepping away from him, a great love she was, he will forever be regretting.
Often times we forget the blessings that those around us tend to provide for us. It's amazing how cloudy all of our futures tend to get... especially if you've ever been the "other" woman.
Good luck!
Much Love,
Jessica -
I know this feeling well, and it's one
I rather not ever feel again in my life.
You have portrayed your thoughts so
beautifully and with true depth.
Wonderfully penned!
Thanks for entering & best of luck -
Thank you for your heartfelt piece, Josie
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thank you so much dear for reading it and appreciating it
I cherish the silver trophy. thank you dear, you made my day.hugs
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Wow
this is amazing words here.
Broad and in Truth you speak. I loved the flow and message sent thru this. Absolutely loved this, and good luck with this piece, sure all is well. I know I was glad to have had the opportunity to read such a wonderful script.
Take care,
Ephiphany
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Intense.
Intense. Very natural and true to emotions. The final two stanzas had me, where we choose to have hope amidst the dark to live, because that makes us stronger and shows who we deserve. You, undeniably are not one to let go! Take care, Nermin.
Cheers!
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MY DEAR KAL THANK YOU FOR CARING TO READ
Well dear thank you thank you for your encouraging words. They mean a loooot to me and your sweet words my dear friend give me a boost to continue. Thank you for believing in me.
hugs
nermin
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"Breathing the same air" as the other woman, particularly if she is a love rival for your man, is a supercharged image. I like the originality and spontaneity of your rhymes but don't like "tremendous" as I find it a little unpoetic. Listen, with the way you look in that display pic, who could resist you, Nermin ? Not me !
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lol tony, love your words dear
and u are the expert so i am changing tremendous
but please if you find some other things u feel not pleasant please tell me
right now what word is better?????
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This is very sad but i loved the ending. she gets her strength back and he will regret the woman he lost. the grass always looks greener on the oter side as they say. great write.
fav part:
Her love for him is tremendous but jealousy is more,
she burns inside and screams her love to the core.
Breathing the same air as the other is agonizing,
sharing the same love and man is terrorizing.
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well how many of us did not have the other woman?
she could be his mother, daughter, sister, wife or girlfriend. some prove intense hatred which becomes natural due to jealousy, and sometimes it is only rejection and denial, but in case it is the other woman as a girlfriend or wife of a man it is very wise to regain the dignity and reject such a situation if the man does not settle it in my opinion, I mean if he is not fair. but a man, any man would certainly have one more favorite than the other, and one with a legal status while the other might not have any status and that can create jealousies on both ends.
Thank you for reading and taking the time to comment. I feel jealousy is awful especially when it comes to a woman and her rival, it could be so debilitating.
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This is really intense. I love the emotion in it. Great write!
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thank you so much for reading and commenting :)
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