Every night comes the same dream,
A dream that takes place on a dark night.....
Its cold out,
Yet I'm still walking around town,
Its dark,
Very late,
I walk around with my hood up, and my head down,
I'm trying to get away,
Just away,
I hear a yell for help,
Its your voice,
I run,
There are three behemoths,
I keep running to your voice,
As the cold air burns my lungs,
They are threatening you,
I stand in the way,
Only to be thrown aside,
Like a childs toy,
I keep coming,
They are distracted,
You get away,
They are angry,
One has a club,
I reach in my pocket,
There's a knife,
That was a mistake,
Another pulls out a gun,
My face loses all warmth,
All I see is frozen glades,
Covered in crimson,
Everything goes black,
I wake up in a hospital,
Your there,
A single clear tear runs down your cheek,
I smile faintly,
I know you care,
The machines stop,
Everything fades from existance........
watcha think? sorry if it sux just tried to do something longer, and this really is a dream i have.....
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Aw my god! That is so sad! Good work.
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Thank you
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dreams can be very weird and unnerving. i have one where im standing, holding my bloody arms out to my mother... she just says why, but i cant ever talk. i have this one often. i liked the way this piece was so visual.. good work
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sad dream...but man have i had thos perfect but sad dreams...
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Wow, this makes me cry. It's such a sad dream. Very emotion. This has a lot of powerful emotion. It reminds me of a dream I had just like this expect it was in a girl version and I was the one dead. I didn't make it to the hospital. You write really well. I can relate :]
grr at the tears but I really enjoyed reading this. I understand this so well. It's like fighting for the one you love no matter how bad your hurt.
My favorite lines were
"I wake up in a hospital,
Your there,
A single clear tear runs down your cheek,
I smile faintly,
I know you care,
The machines stop,
Everything fades from existance........"
Those lines hit me deep! like ice cold. Thanks again for sharing and venting your feelings great write. this is awesome. keep up the great write and this totally doesn't suck
- Star Crossed Lovers ♥
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