Lost in thoughts
Wondering what to do
The sun starts to vanish
The clouds slowly fade
The earth begins to shake
My mind made in twister
Hurricane winds blowing
As ocean currents pull me under
Feels like I'm drowning
Barely breathing
Trying to find my way
Trying to escape from
This fiery pit
We call hell
Reaching for the angel
His hand stretched out
Wanting salvation
Feeling demons pull
Falling farther
Save me, save me
Angel please
You're my only hope
You're my wings to fly
Without you
I can't survive
Author notes
Written - January 26,2009
I didn't write this alone so I can't take all the credit :]
thanks for the help Jason 
In a list
A contest entry
- prewritten contest for all of these groups take a look by serenity silvermoon.
550 points, ended February 3, 2009, 69 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - prewrite contest ENTER ENTER ENTER by serenity silvermoon.
569 points, ended February 8, 2009, 98 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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A really good poem. In a way I can relate to that
Sorry though I have to DQ you, I only wanted to have gold and silver poems. I really enjoy this poem though. Also love your title. Love and Peace!
-Jess
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Aww how deeply heartfelt
and beautiful.
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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Beautiful.
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great poem you two this was written so beautifully the poem is sad which in my case good i do well with commenting on sad poems i can relate to this poem in more ways then one i know how it feels to be lost in a great big hole a i cant get out and when i was younger i kept having nightmare that demons were pulling me though the stairs and the ground to go to hell then one day i saw the devil in my room it was scarry thanks for sharing this poem is still a great poem
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Thanks so much for your kind words and sweet comment. I am glad you can relate.
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Simply beautiful work here!
You both did an amazing job writing this.
Congratulations to you on your trophy!
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Thank you so much for your comment
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Awesome. I love angels. this is very beautiful Maria and Jason. I bet our mom would love this right Maria?
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Wow this is really beautiful never read anything like it. great work you guys.
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*clap* *clap* *clap* *clap* Bravo! Yay! it was wonderful. Keep up the good work darlin.
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-giggles and smiles jumping into owners lap- Meow and thank you so much for the comment means a lot to me
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i loved it expeciall the third verse
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a very nice peon hun i like the whole angel thing its a realy good right i enjoyed it
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Thanks so much for the comment
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I like this a lot. It's very beautiful and touching indeed. :]
great job.
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wow! this is beautiful. its really put together well. so full of emotions. very well done hun =] its great! luve you =]
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Thanks so much for the comment sissy I love you too
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Aw this is a beautifully sad collaboration. I enjoyed reading. ♥
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wow....
This truly is really great, I liked it, full of emotion, dear, pain, I loved, sorry if you wanted a critic I'm not that good at it great job good write....
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This was an amazing write I love it =]
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You're very welcome sis
it was nice working together on this one
I really like it
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