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across the expanse of reality

embarkation point
a zone of non conformance
where predestination avoids choice
subservient to will

journeyed through terminus
in undulations of affair
each microcosm
founded on internal belief

in the superiority of I
blinders worn of existence
that shower strands of perpetuity
with diseased expressions of certitude

leveling the spontaneous
to a speck of insignificance
bequeathed by a thunderstroke
of inspiration denied

and concluding in positon
that each holds to the fact
undeniable and true
I am the center of my universe

Author notes

image prompt;

http://www.art.co.uk/asp/sp-asp/_/pd--10300060/sp--A/igid--1153001/Symphony_in_Red_and_Khaki_II.htm?sOrig=CAT&sOrigID=23945&ui=B7CE68BE85994867B3A2C708694F57BE

image by Laurie Maitland

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  • Jesann gold member
    April 9

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    Beautifully penned.
    A wonderful expression of thought...I really enjoyed reading this.
    Excellent.


  • Angelflower
    January 27

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    this is truly something worth reading again, not because of the abstract feel to it, but because this had such emotion.. a truly wonderful write. thank you very much for sharing.

    Angel


  • Stardust-luvr
    January 27

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    my dear heart the journeys traversed from once kindrd spirits on a road taken in hitting a covetted fork in the pathway as the nucleaus doesnt mesh as strongly. maybe oneday the walls of shared communication will be broken down and leave one less to wonder why I not We. well done hun and many blessings always xxxxxx


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    January 27

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    A clever crafted poem you have penned
    a complex and diverse piece
    that is deep
    Best wishes and thank you for your great entry
    Julie


  • eyesofanangel524
    January 27

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    I am with your brother on this one. Abstract and most certainly one that requires a dictionary...grr...but none the less a well written piece. Center of ones own universe is more complex and you have captured it here. The verbage made one seek out the complexities. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Griswold silver member
    January 26

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    wow, I think it's good, I'm not sure, I dont understand a word of it. So if you were going for the abstract free verse thing, you nailed it on the head. Do you have a translation in hillbilly english I could understand? Best of luck bro...Scott


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    January 26

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    Wow!! I am awe struck!
    Your brilliance is very
    evident in this write.
    Impressive to say the
    least. Best of luck in
    the contest.

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